It is a common phenomenon that nowadays children spend most of their time on studies or organized activities. Some people hold the view that children should have more free time to do things they like. However, I disagree with the statement.
To begin with, such homework and organized activities are vital to children’s future development. This is because such tasks are specially made for children to make them gain knowledge and build a strong body, and a good education background and health status will help them lay a solid foundation for the future. For example, by doing a certain amount of exercise about linear algebra at the end of a day, students will get a better understanding of the math theories that they learn at school, which can help them improve their academic performance; by joining an organized football club, children will have to run at the playground and pass the football to each other, which can make them exercise regularly and improve their physical health.
On the other hand, children are not supposed to do whatever they want with the extra time they are given to. Young students are not mature enough to make wise decisions for themselves on how to spend their leisure time, they will choose to spend the time they are given to on leisure activities and rest. To be specific, after having classes for an entire day, students often feel exhausted, only hoping to take a break or immerse into the internet. They may not want to open another exercise book to figure out more difficult mathematical problems or work out at a gym. Without making homework and organized activities compulsory, children who are not self-disciplined will not be able to get the hang of the knowledge that they receive at school and do enough exercise.
Admittedly, giving more time to children and letting them arrange their schedule are beneficial to them to some extent, since they will get a chance to figure out what they truly want and pursue their goals freely; however, the merit of giving students more time can not compare with those of making them spend their time on assignments and various activities.
In conclusion, it is not a good idea to give children more time and let them do want they want freely; instead, they should focus on their school work and all sorts or organized activities.
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- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87405541562 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57269983874 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488664987406 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.28904434 48.9658058833 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 148.846153846 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5384615385 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403939466853 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172163143006 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101968797521 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267940693323 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999318132997 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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