Friendship is vital to everyone, and we cannot live without the company of our friends. Some people argue that two people can be good friends even if one person has more money than the other. Contrary to these people’s opinion is my perspective that two people cannot be friends if there is an income difference between them.
First, people who have different asserts also have different view and values. This is because they live in different background, and all the past experiences modify them into who they are today. For example, an entrepreneur that is from a business family does not share the same opinion on global trade as a peasant who grows up on a farm; a child who grows up rich may disagree with a student from a struggling family’s way of disposing left-over food; Those people may not even have a pleasant conversation due to their differing views, let alone strengthening bonds of friendship.
Second, people with different amount of property have little chances to interact with each other, which makes it hard for them to establish close friendship. This is because people who have different salaries are usually from different walks of life, so they may not be able to meet and get in touch with each other often due to the different places they live and work in. For example, it is hard to imagine that a successful lawyer spends time with a worker who can barely make ends meet, since they live in completely different communities; similarly, it is not likely that the president of a company will have dinner with a homeless man regularly, because they may not even able to meet each other often-the president’s private drives him straight away to his house or a fancy party after work. Therefore, the possibility that two people with different levels of wealth would be good friends is not high.
In conclusion, two people cannot build friendship if one person has more money than the other.
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career 78
- Do you agree or disagree Two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than the other one does 70
- TPO48 Integrated Writing 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...ve in different background, and all the past experiences modify them into who they are today. Fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83987915408 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58477886323 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543806646526 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.609186942 48.9658058833 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.636363636 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0909090909 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221772953118 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12233451957 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143768809844 0.0737576698707 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205891669966 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136185771489 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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