Job, the foundation of a quality life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over what kind of job is better. A job with more vacation time, in some people’s views, is a good choice. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that a challenging job with less vacation is better.
What must be prioritized is that challenging jobs, compared to boring jobs, is more beneficial to improve people’s professional levels by triggering their enthusiasm in learning and motivation to develop skills. To begin with, what we can not ignore is that a challenging job can encourage us to learn new knowledge. In detail, when we work on challenging tasks we will meet difficulties, which will trigger us to learn theoretical knowledge and experience that are needed for solving problems. In contrast, people do not have enough motivation to obtain more theoretical knowledge and experience if they have a boring job. Moreover, it is challenging job that helps people to develop skills. To explain it further, people need to get the hang of all sorts of skills, like communicating skill, time-managing skill and stress-management ability, which will push people to learn and make progress constantly. On the other hand, will boring job trigger people to improve such skills?
What should be equally worth discussing is that compared to a job with more vacation, a job with less vacation can promote career development by letting them have more working time and maintain good relationship with people at work. To be specific, the less time people spend on vacation, the more time they will have to finish projects, write reports and meet clients. By contrast, under no circumstances will they have time to finish those work if they spend plenty of time on vacations. Additionally, people can build up good relationships at work when they have a job with less vacation. To be specific, employees will have more time to maintain relationships with colleagues and superiors. On the contrary, people will not have as much as time to work and socialize with colleagues if they are on vacation during most of the working time.
Professional levels, the foundation of a fulfilled life, will be obtained by doing a challenging job. Career development, the essential contributor to future promotion, can be facilitated by working on a job with little vacation. To conclude, only by having a challenging job with less vacation, can people reap numerous benefits.
- Do you agree or disagree with the statement These days children spend more time on doing homework or participating in organized activities related to school or sports However they would be given more time to do whatever they want 87
- Participating in organizations and clubs is as important as academic studies for students 80
- TPO48 Integrated Writing 85
- Which do you prefer with the same rate of pay an interesting and challenging job with less vacation or a job with more vacation time but less fun 73
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 932, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'bore'
Suggestion: bore
...ess constantly. On the other hand, will boring job trigger people to improve such skil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, thus, in contrast, kind of, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11330049261 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01207660905 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450738916256 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8153087162 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.263157895 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351764208028 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146857565382 0.076458572812 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102028784144 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265423188315 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848347793084 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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