Do you agree or disagree? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainments and athletics, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Even though some psychologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that children need more to use of famous people’s ideas, I strongly recommend that the older people should applicant and act to the opinions of celebrities. As we know the previous generation did not access enough to technologies and renowned people and also they had not excellent circumstances and conditions to educations and study in universities. And believe it or not, adult people can improve their information and view by using celebrities’ thought. I will elaborate my idea with some significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that the most influential effect of famous’ people is for older people who they have never approached to some of the modern and development technologies that today these are available for young children easily. As a matter of fact, during previous year people decided and some work without enough awareness and knowledge which can see it’s inefficient results in this generation. As an example, when I accepted in universities I have never seen and reed something about artists who are living in our countries due to we have never had internet, however, now I have a meeting with a famous scholars in our university this can be useful and helpful for me that I can find and select my perfect future job. As you can see, older people can take and use of renown person’s idea.
Another my remarkable reason is that the older people are at a sensitive edge that requests the various ideas and thoughts to choose a prominent job and this will be suitable and great conditions that they speak and interview via some artists, athletes, players and etc. this way not only makes people be more optimistic but also helps they will be more self-confidence. For instance, as I graduated in university and I wanted to apply for a lob, I decided to work in a club, but when I searched on the internet and read some articles about biographies of an artist, I reform my idea and now I have an efficient job related to my field. This experience thought me that, I should often talk and use some different person’s view, exactly they have relative experiences.
As a result, based on all of the related reasons one can conclude that the opinions of famous and skilled people can be useful for people that they do not know what files and works are important for them and they are in a fragile circumstance, so they can act and use other experiences of successful people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for instance, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80855855856 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90832924324 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502252252252 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.0224960257 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.230769231 100.406767564 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1538461538 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186332631207 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739272112547 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065202348837 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133863510332 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447957102121 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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