It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, people have many trainers which are not real school teachers. While some people believe that young people and children most often learn from their family and the education system, others believe that youth usually are influenced by their friends mostly in the same age. From my vantage point, the second opinion has more weight in society. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
First, it is no secret to anyone that each person selects his or her friends from a group of people around, but they do not have any chance to choose their family. So, they usually have more resemblance in their behavior and thoughts unlike the family members. For example, a woman who was born in the suburbs and now is a best physician in the city, has so many friends who are scientists or lawyers, although all her family and also relatives had not finished their school. So, how could we expect her to absorb from her household rather than her friends.
Furthermore, friends are about the same age, and it helps them to effortlessly understand each other in a society growing so fast. People who live in a period of time, have similar experiences and problems. Therefore, they would be understood by their friends more than their teachers or parents would realize them. For example, in our new society, children and young students have many complications in social networks, like Facebook, Instagram, and so forth, in which none of their parents, siblings or teachers have any opinion about the existence of these problems.
In a nutshell, having taken the aforementioned reasons and examples into account. I do believe that people are affected more easily by their friends than other people, like their teacher, parents or maybe their senior colleagues.
- Tpo45Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and example 71
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Although science and technology will continue to improve the most significant improvement for the quality of people s lives has already taken place 70
- You are helping to select a leader for a student organization or club Do you agree or disagree that a person s honesty is the most important thing to consider in deciding whom to vote for Use reasons and examples to support your position 60
- Tpo45Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and example 73
- Do you agree that people easily learn from the friends beside them Use specific examples and evidences to support your answer 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 321, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... who was born in the suburbs and now is a best physician in the city, has so many...
^
Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...sician in the city, has so many friends who are scientists or lawyers, although all her...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...y growing so fast. People who live in a period of time, have similar experiences and problems....
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01612903226 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56337162532 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567741935484 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5991159938 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.071428571 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13667834466 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489445843854 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400420571479 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929738729589 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230375410416 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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