Do you agree professional athletes such as the football player and basketball player deserve high salaries to be paid?
The salary is a crucial part to make people working hard. Some people may think that athletes just spend their physical strength in sports. It is not worth to pay a high salary for a player, while others argue that it will be essential for athletes’ high salaries because their outstanding skills and cooperation. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that a professional athlete should receive high salaries.
First of all, efficient training is extremely expensive for the athletes. Players spent a lot of money on training. Experts can help them gain extraordinary scores. For example, basketball players not only need field practice but also have phycology training to face the changes during their competitions. Phycological strategies can be useful to fight in high pressure. Physics and phycology are totally different fields that an athlete needs to advance. Players have to hire lots of experts to encourage their abilities to gain better scores without any sponsors. Therefore, spend money on efficiency training is necessary for athletes’ careers. Even more, after players retired, they will feedback in the sports field by high-quality coaching. Hence, if athletes deserve high salaries to be paid, their training will be exhaustive.
Secondly, professional athletes make the sports industry quite develop. The athletes’ fame will be stronger and bigger after they won the prize. More people buying tickets to watch competition and purchasing products the athletes endorsed. These will be the main incomes for the sports industry. The amount of money should be feedback on the athletes because of their far-reaching influence. For instance, the famous football player David Beckham. His fame attracted big company support his career, created his brand and football team. Lots of people focus on his personal image, buying his soccer suits and joining his fans club. These not only increase his fame but promote the soccer industry. The income from those activities encouraged him to establish a foundation to help kids in Africa who don’t have a chance to play football. Therefore, much more people contribute to the sports industry through his influence, these boosts to well circulation and advance the sports industry.
Definitely, some people argue that athletes do not deserve such high salaries to be paid. For instance, training an athlete will cost an amount of money. Without the resource from nation, it is hard to have competitive players. In addition, they may suffer from physical injury which may diminish their competitive chance. However, it’s worth that athletes try to break through their limitations and gain the amount of money, they become a coach or teacher to train new young players. Furthermore, professional athletes will attract more advertisers to invest in the sports industry. Therefore, it is indeed worthwhile that they own high salaries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'facing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: facing
...actice but also have phycology training to face the changes during their competitions. ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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...sts to well circulation and advance the sports industry. Definitely, some people ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...tract more advertisers to invest in the sports industry. Therefore, it is indeed worth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4113785558 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78554165709 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522975929978 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9747624849 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.28125 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.28125 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31184744117 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786406536167 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904926226884 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199198652571 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608734462126 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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