do you agrre with the statement that at universities sports and social activities should receive equal financial supports compare to classes and libraries
In the preceding decades, universities play a vital role in people'e lives and students dedicate a lot of their time spending in the atmosphere of their university. the question which arises here is whether university should pay equal financial support to sport and social activieties as classes and libraries. some people believe it is indispensable to endow equal money to students sports and social activites as their acadamic goals, while others hold the opposite view. I contend that there should be balanced attention to both fun activities and academic objectives. In what follows, i will elaborate on my perspective.
The most remarkable to be mentioned is that students require free times and breaks to get rest and relive their accumulated fatigue throughout the week. There must be some times which dedicated to their hubbies so they would boost their energy and refresh their mind. There are scientific statics that show student who work all their week on their studies would be plagued by acute level of depression and it would be detrimental to their physical and mental health. In contrast, students who attend so many sport classes and social events would experience better scores in their exams comparing to other bookworm students.
Another equally important point which deserves words here is that attending different social events would let students to fortify their social skills and they would broaden their circle of friends and as a result it would enhance their self-confidence's level. in addition, doing sports is so beneficial for their body and activates different regions of their brain and it flourish their memory to remind and learn new lessons much more affectiveley. For instance, one of my friends attends swimming classes.Therefore, not only does she get different awards, but also she becomes top student in the class too.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that students would benefit from different fun activities at universities rather than spending their whole time studying for their courses in the classes or in the libraries. Besides, it is anticipated that according to the beneficial influence of sports and social activities there would be much more finantial support dedicated to it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24175824176 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80772456488 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557692307692 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.9209072749 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.285714286 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161037631986 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721813696803 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799352038194 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125010888055 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707965710122 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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