Education has a influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to start educating our children society standard rules and hoe they should follow them in order for the best result to follow suits as they are the pillars and the result will guide our nation toward progress. When comes to this statement, some people may agree with the idea and give us sound reasons for the belief. On the other hands, some people might disagree and have different opinion. Also those opponent probably will provide us with puissant evidences to support thoughts. I believe it is difficult on educating children because of the innovation of internet and electronic devices, the reasons go as follows.
To begin with, due to the revolutionary impact on our new technology that has a spectacular breakthrough in many sphere on our communities, such as smartphones and tablets, that sometimes will affect negatively on children education, they will sway to do what ever they want without listening to teachers and eldest instruction. For example, my sister used to be a obedient but after she having an Ipad, she start to play online games on study time and ignore my mother's opinion.This action cause her result dropped drastically. After my mother realize the problem, she confiscated my sister's Ipad consequently my sister's result improved.
Secondly, internet has an incontrovertible affect on our daily life. Indeed, many children are able to purchase with electronic devises, this will create a toxic atmosphere toward children because they will tempt to employ themselves in an inappropriate time such as without listening to professor valuable lesson. Instead of concentrate on what lecturer teaching, they will check on their social media such as, Facebook, Twitter and Instagram. This action will cause tremendous distraction toward children and not conducive acquiring knowledge. Moreover, many studied which have been done by many universities in United States constantly stated that the impact of the online entertainment and social networking cause the children become rebellious and difficult to educate, and more studied was studying on this subject. Finally the scholar prove the examination, this result make me believe that children should leave internet away.
For all have been discussed may finally draw a conclusion that smartphone and social networking cause a tremendous distraction on children education. This action will improve children future lives. People who holds different opinion have right to believe. But my opinions and other people are overwhelming to much to be ignored.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Education has a influential and tremendous impact on ou...
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Line 1, column 491, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ht disagree and have different opinion. Also those opponent probably will provide us...
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Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put between 'will' and 'affect'.
Suggestion: will sometimes affect
..., such as smartphones and tablets, that sometimes will affect negatively on children education, they ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tion. For example, my sister used to be a obedient but after she having an Ipad, ...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ter used to be a obedient but after she having an Ipad, she start to play online games...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...dient but after she having an Ipad, she start to play online games on study time and ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...tudy time and ignore my mothers opinion.This action cause her result dropped drastic...
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ondly, internet has an incontrovertible affect on our daily life. Indeed, many children a...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...e studied was studying on this subject. Finally the scholar prove the examination, this...
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...nions and other people are overwhelming to much to be ignored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37288135593 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84259232515 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547215496368 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.8616532293 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.789473684 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7368421053 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172998378426 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487451797406 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450206064549 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102701635215 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352351911195 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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