The extended family (grandparents, cousins, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
it is widely accepted that in today’s society, which robots and machines do most of the work, the only way that human beings can separate their route from another creature, that is, learn how to behave. Some people may hold the view that television programs can help any individual to the recognition of their own characteristics, but others have a negative attitude toward it. I personally have an interest in the former. In the next two paragraphs, I will simply examine my reasons and prove this view.
Without any shadow of a doubt, time, as we all know, is money. it is crystal clear that movies or everything that exists on television are just for entertainment, and nothing we can learn on because those wasteful programs cause poverty-stricken of knowledge. Although we occasionally saw “informative programs” on television, our life was not influenced by most of them, so those programs are general. As Dr. Duduk one of my professors said and I am quoting “television is my best friend because it caused I reach anywhere which I thought about” which emphasizes that anytime his wife turned on television he went on his room and did his work. Under such circumstances that nowadays a world full of information helping us to be successful we cannot use television for training our behavior, and watching those programs have a negative effect on young people’s behave.
another equally remarkable point to confirms my stance is that having practical experience with adequate knowledge. Undoubtedly, most of those wasteful programs are not real; therefore, cannot help young people to find their way which will make them a better position. Unlike television that full of useless information, books can informative for juveniles because they are not only real but have plenty of experience. As an example of this system, years ago, I read a beautiful book, the title of which was The Stranger, which was written by A.C. impressed me much. The book demonstrated that people, who are in trouble, can face those difficulties with several methods that nothing of the methods is watching television.
To draw the conclusion grounded on the above statement, both of my reasons, which contain the waste time and lack of practical experience, can prove my pictures about television and movies have a negative effect on people especially juveniles.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that will affect your daily life Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95203551544 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578811369509 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6722902378 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.866666667 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 5.45110844103 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0182861140986 0.236089414692 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00696197350916 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0186760493893 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0104780400711 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0122445561415 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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