The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
During the last decades, people's lifestyle has been altered by the advent of advancements. In the modern era, Large families have transformed into nuclear families, and they have become smaller and smaller during the time. One of the heated debates in this realm is whether extended families are currently as important as they were in the past Although there might be some counterexamples, I argue that today, the extended families do not play a significant role in our lives. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent reason to be mentioned is that the modern era has had a profound impact on individuals' lifestyle. In the past, people tended to live beside their parents or even at the same house after getting married to continue their families' craft such as farming. But, at the present time, the majority of couples prefer to become independent. Thus, many leave their parents, towns, cities to improve the quality of their life. As a result, this new lifestyle and long distances between people and their extended family may influence their relationship and its impact on their lives.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that nowadays, everybody suffers from lacking enough time. More technologies, more complication. life has become complex not only for young people but also for elders. All people are complaining about that they cannot even allocate enough time to their close relatives such as their children. By way of illustration, last week, a colleague of mine told me he has not been able to take a trip with his children for more than six months, and he was really sad for this problem.
The last but not the least, it is an undeniable fact that luxurious lifestyles have made it difficult to visit our families regularly. As a rule, People try to show off their luxury life through their family parties. As a matter of fact, these expensive parties are not affordable for all members of a family. For instance, I used to get together with my cousins every month, but, unfortunately, various types of expensive food that were used in these family gathering led me to withdraw them.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas were presented above, I highly believe that today, people do not have enough time to spend not only with their extended families but also with their close relatives due to their modern lifestyle. Besides, luxurious parties may prevent people from visiting each other frequently. Let hope us more and more families try to live simple and enjoy making memories together.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...modern era has had a profound impact on individuals lifestyle. In the past, people tended t...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun leave seems to be countable; consider using: 'many leaves'.
Suggestion: many leaves
...les prefer to become independent. Thus, many leave their parents, towns, cities to improve...
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Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Life
.... More technologies, more complication. life has become complex not only for young p...
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Line 7, column 447, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this family' or 'these families'?
Suggestion: this family; these families
...pes of expensive food that were used in these family gathering led me to withdraw them. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, really, second, so, thus, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94226327945 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57933240201 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556581986143 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4787711676 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.904761905 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110443419358 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286358474172 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422161892765 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0657479806591 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351267044515 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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