Even though there is a widely held notion that the extended family is as important as in the past, I believe that it is losing its importance as the time goes by, and the communication tools become more extensive. My reasons for supporting this hypothesis are organized as follows.
First of all, communication and relation with other individuals were extremely restricted in the past. Therefore, being related in the extended family was a good excuse for people to be linked to each other and solve their issues by social interactions. On the contrary, nowadays, individuals can interact with each other independent of their culture, distance, or even language. Accordingly, they could create a human network which benefits them maximally. Moreover, the network would be flexible in size an type; meaning that people can adjust their human networks when they find it necessary.
Furthermore, nowadays, people tend to be less racist; as a result, they would unify more efficiently compared to previous generations. In other words, in the past, people had a belief that there are merits in being related with someone in blood, but now, the communities are going forward to believing the notion that all human beings are equally valuable, and they should be judged by their behavior, not by their race. This notion, practically, would cause a decline in the importance of relatives. For example, when I went to university, I met a broad range of peers with whom I had tremendous features in common so that I kept losing connection with my relatives during that particular time.
Finally, the size of the extended families is diminishing slightly, being occupied by several issues in our complex societies. The more complicated lifestyle becomes, the smaller family sizes would be. This phenomenon would lead to the fact that the family community is inadequate to socially satisfy diverse desires of human beings. This is the reason that people seek more friends and fellows from outside of their family, and subsequently, lose their interest in their cousins, aunts, uncles, and so forth.
With all being said, I draw a conclusion that hardly do people consider their extended family members as precious assets assumed in the past. This trend results from the fact that the world is becoming a global village, and consequently, local bonds would get looser as the world becomes more united.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: flexible
...ximally. Moreover, the network would be flexible in size an type; meaning that people can adjust...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
..., the network would be flexible in size an type; meaning that people can adjust th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14066496164 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73889759518 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552429667519 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3829176314 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.235294118 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.47058823529 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177203143441 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571527822749 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646202174019 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107382671254 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449842631166 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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