In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.
Living in the modern society and technology era, we have been overwhelmed with countless benefits of the technologies. Human body like any other complex systems is influenced by various factors on which affect our health in different aspects. Consequently, there are a plethora of reasons why the average age rises among the people. In my opinion, this change is underlying on the development of medical technology and improvement in working condition. These two principal causes will be explored in detail in the following essay.
To begin with, development in the healthcare has brought numerous merits to the people’s life. At the earlier time, there were only limited devices for diagnosing diseases, especially in the first stage. Not only does the new techniques enable doctors to have a better prognostication, it provides the opportunity for the patients to get a better cure. The death rate in the recent year is believed to have been decreased due to the emergence of these improvements. My own family experience demonstrates the benefits of the technology. My grandfather, who was on the honored athletics of the city, passed away in his early 40s. He had an unknown heart issue, which was undiagnosable by the cardiologist due to the lack of advanced tools. Since the problem has not been recognized, the doctor just prescribed some drugs for alleviation the pain. Eventually, he passed away after suffering a heart attack. Were the more medical diagnostic devices to have been available, the chance of curing of the illness might have increased. This traumatic experience taught me that how medical advances can save people’s life.
Secondly, new working policies, which is becoming more widespread as a global standard in the modern countries, elevate the health condition. The policy is issued by the world health organization (WHO) in order to suggest a balance between working hours and holidays. Studies show that it has a positive impact on both employees and employers. It should be noted that the policy is strongly refuted at the beginning by capitals, they assumed that the efficiency would be inclined by decreasing the working hours, but they gradually satisfied when they realized that how the pressure on the employees has a detrimental impact on the efficiency in the long run. Unfortunately, my country, as a developing country, has not accepted the new policy and companies still consider a few holidays for their employees. For instance, my father had a few holidays, 6 days annually, besides he had to go to the office on some holidays. Although his job was really lucrative, he was not satisfied since he was always swamped with the work. These workloads have harmfully impacted upon his health and brought various ailments. These consequences are irreversible and definitely reduce the length of life.
In conclusion, I fell that improvement in medical technology and working conditions are two major causes in providing long life for people. Every healthy society should have new medical devices and follow the new policy to improve the health status.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2610.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94586897197 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8834032533 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5185185185 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92592592593 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0482584454676 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0134816239509 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268299627612 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0350529791673 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256095824936 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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