In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think accounts for this phenomenon?
In Modern times people's life expectancy has risen sharply. People credit different factors like advancement in technology, the shift in education policy, and the healthier diets. I would give significant credit to our improvement in technology. I feel this way for three reasons which I will explore in the essay.
First of all, the drastic improvement in communication methods enables the reach of quality medical facilities to the last person of the country. Earlier, the only way a villager can get severe treatment is by reaching the city's hospital. However, due to poverty and distance, patients mostly missed the early phase of disease treatment. Only after getting in a bad phase, people used to rush city's hospital. In contrast, with the help of video conferencing, a villager can get treatment in their primary hospital by the city's doctor. In addition, a patient's lab reports can be sent via the internet to a doctor. Thus, the doctor can closely monitor the patient's condition. My personal example is a compelling example of this. My aunt started to feel the throught pain few months back. She was treated it casually and took general medicine for pain. However, Nurse at primary hospital asked her to set an appointment to doctor for video-confrence treatment as she was reluctant to go to city hospital due to cost involvment. Finally, doctor asked her to take few lab tests. After that those reports were send via internet. Doctor identified she is in early stage of cancer. So with the help of technology we were able to detect a cancer in early stage. If video-conferencing had'nt been available, she would had suffered with deadly consequences.
Second, Advancement medical technology now made possible to treat the disease who were once consided untreatable. Now we have made progress in theraputic drugs and vaccine technology. People died in past generations from deadly diseases like polio and small-pox. However, as we made progress in vaccine technology. We have developed a vaccine for these fatal infections. As a result, many of viruses has now been eradicated from earth and not even a single person is now sufferning from the diseaes. For Instance, Malaria is one of the deadly disease which was raging havoc around worl in mid-half of the last centuary. As the diseases carieer was mosqitos. Only option at that time people had to try not to come contact to mosquitoes. But once infected, there was nothing to save a patients. Consequently, Hundreds of people died by the disease. However, In the last decade of the last century, Doctors came up with the vaccine for it. Thus after few years, the vaccine removed the lethal effect of diseases. In the process saved millions of lives.
Third, technology now provided a better medium to connect with friend and family which leads to less mental problems in society. Previously the only way to connect with people was to send a post and then wait for their reply. This whole process was time taking which was in between days to weeks. People who where away from home, started to develop loneliness. Loneliness is one of the main cause of depression and other mental health problems. Nowadays with the help of social media and video calls, communication has become so much easy. People can instantly connect with friends and family. For example, I am now living away from my home for my undergrad. At starting, I felt homesick. However, when I started to use Facebook and other social media apps. Suddenly the feeling of loneliness fades away. As a result, I become much happier, and my mental state improves.
In conclusion, I would choose the progress in the tech sector as one of the main reasons for improving the population's living age. This is because technology has become easier to reach villages to give the best medical treatment; progress in medical fields has made many diseases non-dangerous, and it makes communication easy with loved ones.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 550, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...tal by the citys doctor. In addition, a patients lab reports can be sent via the interne...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1074, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...doctor asked her to take few lab tests. After that those reports were send via intern...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 1104, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sent'.
Suggestion: sent
...ab tests. After that those reports were send via internet. Doctor identified she is ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1275, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...r in early stage. If video-conferencing hadnt been available, she would had suffered ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 1307, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...rencing hadnt been available, she would had suffered with deadly consequences. Sec...
^^^
Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... worl in mid-half of the last centuary. As the diseases carieer was mosqitos. Only...
^^
Line 3, column 781, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a patient' or simply 'patients'?
Suggestion: a patient; patients
...nce infected, there was nothing to save a patients. Consequently, Hundreds of people died ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 937, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...octors came up with the vaccine for it. Thus after few years, the vaccine removed th...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, third, thus, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3277.0 1977.66487455 166% => OK
No of words: 658.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98024316109 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06473204393 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75167703731 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 326.0 212.727598566 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495440729483 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1032.3 618.680645161 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 48.0 20.6003584229 233% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1548979988 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.2708333333 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7083333333 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89583333333 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.85842293907 467% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15727205104 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317157576238 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390513004271 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940702707599 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353446331926 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 86.8835125448 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 550, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...tal by the citys doctor. In addition, a patients lab reports can be sent via the interne...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1074, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...doctor asked her to take few lab tests. After that those reports were send via intern...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 1104, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sent'.
Suggestion: sent
...ab tests. After that those reports were send via internet. Doctor identified she is ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1275, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...r in early stage. If video-conferencing hadnt been available, she would had suffered ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 1307, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...rencing hadnt been available, she would had suffered with deadly consequences. Sec...
^^^
Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... worl in mid-half of the last centuary. As the diseases carieer was mosqitos. Only...
^^
Line 3, column 781, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a patient' or simply 'patients'?
Suggestion: a patient; patients
...nce infected, there was nothing to save a patients. Consequently, Hundreds of people died ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 937, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...octors came up with the vaccine for it. Thus after few years, the vaccine removed th...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, third, thus, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3277.0 1977.66487455 166% => OK
No of words: 658.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98024316109 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06473204393 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75167703731 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 326.0 212.727598566 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495440729483 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1032.3 618.680645161 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 48.0 20.6003584229 233% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1548979988 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.2708333333 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7083333333 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89583333333 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.85842293907 467% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15727205104 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317157576238 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390513004271 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940702707599 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353446331926 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 86.8835125448 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.