get higher promotions by being active in group disscussions
One aspect in our lives is working in job. Many people want to get promotions in their jobs to have luxury lives. In my opinion, to get high position in work by being active in group discussions. Doing extra homework not only develops employee’s skills but it also develops their relationships.
To begin with, being active in teamwork will earn us rewards. When workers inter into a group and discuss many subjects, they will improve their speaking skill by talking to each other and try to suggest their own opinions. In addition, employees when discuss between them, every person will try to listen and accept other nations. This leads to increase listening skill. For example, when I worked in advertisement company, I was sitting with my team work to choose the best ideas of advertising. Everyone gave suggestions and reasons for his choice. Then, after discussion by speaking and listening to everyone, we choice the best one. Consequently, the best idea will increase the company’s profits, so the person who gave that idea got a higher position as a reward. Consequently, being an active in group discussion helps to get a promotion in job.
Additionally, being energetic in teamwork will improve relationships. In other words, when the agents work together for a long time, they will get close to each other. Every worker will know about other classmates who works with them. Consequently, labors will increase their work connections. For instance, my brother worked in volunteer groups in my city, to serve people. He knew many people during their work. As a result, now, he knows many leaders and bosses who will give him a good promotion in next his volunteer. That is why I think working in group and being active in will improve the relationships which encourage labors to get promotions in jobs.
To conclude, I think to get higher position in work, the labor should be active in teamwork for two reasons: it develops employee’s skills and develops work connections.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, so, then, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01201201201 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7680977345 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525525525526 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0824411011 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8636363636 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1363636364 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253095687503 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857068778391 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123577771232 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185286697091 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216692772472 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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