global
No one can deny that we are living in a global environment, and it is easy to catch information from all over the world. Life videos on Youtube, news of international newspapers, and even popular English podcasts all tell the events are happening around the world to us. Though some people hold the view that it is no use to learn about it, I support that it is important to know events of the world. I will illustrate several reasons for my idea in the subsequent passage.
To begin with, learning about international events gives us an international mind and increases our knowledge. If you just care about daily life and only notice what happened around you, you will lose the chance to see things from different perspectives and will not have various kinds of knowledge. Honestly speaking, one of my friends is a perfect example of this. When he was in high school, he thought that only the information about his life is useful, so he became a boring person who other students did not want to chat with. In contrast, after he entered a university in America, he began to aware that everything around the world is interesting and attractive. He learned a lot about international political events and global history. Then, he gradually could view things from many perspectives. If he had not gone through international events and history, he would not have been capable of having more opinions and knowledge about the world.
In addition, people who are learning much about global events can have a better investment profit. With the rapid development of the market, a number of people begin to invest by themselves. If you have more learning about the world, it is likely that you can see the market clearer and have a good profit by investment. For instance, my father was interested in business and bought stocks in 2007 when the stock market is rapidly growing. Then, he earned much money with his stock price increasing. A year later, news from the USA said that a big bank, Raymond Brother, bankrupted, and several events that happened at that time hit the American stock market. My father read this news carefully, and he thought this possible influence the market of China, so he sold most of his stocks at that. A few days later, it is not surprising that the Chinese market suffered a lot, as he estimated, but he avoided a huge loss by reading global news.
To sum up, I strongly believe that knowing the events of the world can benefit us a lot. This is because we can gain various perspectives and learn new knowledge from them and because we can have more investment profit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...some people hold the view that it is no use to learn about it, I support that it is...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, if, so, then, for instance, in addition, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63521524299 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507692307692 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6951046485 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6818181818 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0872466421022 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362434452498 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778543008894 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0555561021856 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371640610952 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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