The government should spend more money in support of ats than in support in sports? do you agree or disagree
Recently, the concept of how the government distribute its budget has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that government should allocate more funds for the improvement of sports; however, others claim that arts’ enhancement are more magnificent. From a personal perspective, government should distribute money for both aspects evenly, given that sports and arts have the same importance for the society. While sports are significant for people’s health, arts should be addressed for their contribution in developed civilization. Below I will strive my supporting points in more details.
The first and foremost point, sports have a positive impact on society. Not only because it is very significant for people’s personality, but also, it is essential for their physical fitness. A vivid example that can be given to shed a light on what was elaborated above is in the developed countries such as United states and Canada people usually accustomed to play sport consistently which minimize the risk od some disease, such as diabetes and high blood pressure. Couple with better health, confidence is another benefit of the sport. Provided that people keep playing sports, it will be always refreshed and energized; furthermore, it has a crucial effect on their personality. Therefore, funding sports s imperative.
Next, art is nor less importance than sports. Arts represent culture; to put in another way, when a society has vast arts that is mean it has a rich and fantastic culture. IN addition to that, arts serve as sorts of entertainments, such as movies and concerts, which are very important to people to socialize and communicate. Couple with entertainment, emotional impact is another reason why arts is very vital. Medicine and engineering students say they study better when they have music play in the playground. A recent survey done by The University od Toronto found that, students’ performance in a stander test improved significantly when Mozart was playing during the test, given that music improves general cognition in every field. Consequently, putting more money in arts is indispensable.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt. Sports and arts are fundamental for any society. It suggested that government compromises to achieve arts/sports funds balance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'will' and 'be'.
Suggestion: will always be
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to achieve arts/sports funds balance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48199445983 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08138346723 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592797783934 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.9140504477 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2380952381 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1904761905 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143370138785 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482235047195 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490728409614 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917183499895 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652503192589 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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