The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best
With the pandemic looming over the world since the end of 2019, it vitally important to invest in healthcare more than the government used to do to provide a safe environment for citizens so that they can return to their normal routines as soon as possible. Therefore, even if financing land exploration or education has its merits, it is better to consider healthcare as a top priority under this circumstance, which can be elaborated for the following reasons.
First and foremost, Healthcare has been taken lightly before pandemic and we paid a heavy price for that. Million of people get infected, many of who have severe syndrome. Unfortunately this number is still going up. Were it not for the shortage of investment in healthcare, many countries would have sufficient preparation to fight against COVI-19. Particularly, the healthcare fund can be applied to meet the demand of hospital beds, staff, vaccines to name a few.
On the other hand, most governments get accustomed to spending money on where they can maximize return and minimize cost. Consequently, Investing in land exploration appears to be a good option to earn profits in a short term, whereas financing healthcare which bring little return back receives little attention. However, this approach is not sustainable under pandemic since many places go into lockdown, along with the shutdown of hotels, shopping malls, or businesses relying on travelers’ consumption. Therefore, it is time to direct our interest in a long term return, which is to deal with the
virus with more investment in healthcare so that it can set up a foundation of the development of others.
Meanwhile, as long as the pandemic is still rampant, many schools have to delay the schedule of the beginning of a new semester, not to mention that online courses are almost available from elementary schools to colleges. To maintain the operation of these institutions, the government needs to offer safe access for students to study first before considering any further investment of education. For example, rather than investing education, the government can spend money on healthcare infrastructure that produce enough masks for students to wear regularly to reduce the threat from COVI-19.
To sum up, only when the government prioritizes the investment of healthcare can the afraid of the unprecedented future of our society be reduced under the threat of a pandemic.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: A Million
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Suggestion: whom
...Million of people get infected, many of who have severe syndrome. Unfortunately thi...
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Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...financing healthcare which bring little return back receives little attention. However, thi...
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, whereas, while, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19693094629 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97683268361 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567774936061 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0028351797 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.466666667 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0666666667 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153463658996 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493004919809 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429708226478 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864478313801 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03098471881 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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