Is progress always good ?
As TV, newspapers, other social medias such as online platforms unremittingly advocate the fruits of science, technology or civilization, few people question the hypothesis that making progresses in domains mentioned above is surely beneficial to humanity or even other species. In reality, nonetheless, this over-simplified assumption is not always the case, if not makes things worse, which can be explained in the following reasons.
First, technological progresses that make our lives better can sometimes brings up undesirable consequences. Ever since our ancestors learn how to utilize various objects as tools to increase their surviving rate and reduce uncertainty in hazardous jungles, we human being keep discover and invent instruments, aiming for better living standards. No doubts that progresses like these are ostensibly good for the improvements regarding either convenience, efficiency or safety. However, one cannot deny that such progresses also lead us to escalate our greed on extracting limited resources faster than their recovery rates and eventually leave less rooms for our future generation to be prosperous. For example, woods are essential for construction, and progresses such as inventing better tools to cut down more trees or making trucks that can transport more lumbers are considered successfully as they boost the profit of the industry, on which many workers' wages rely. Despite these progresses benefit this specific business, it cannot simply be considered as good due to its possible cost, exacerbating deforestation or destroying wild lives habitats that may cause unprecedented troubles in the near future.
Second,with the support of scrupulous research and experiments, scientific progresses occur to have small margin error, yet their danger cannot be omitted especially when their application are used in a large scale. After all, a recent beneficial scientific progress might turn to be a disaster soon after its accumulated pernicious effects are big enough to be noticed. A well-known example substantiating this idea is the generalizing usage of pesticide over these decades. At first, the pesticide that has a strong effect on killing bugs draws worldwide attention and then it is soon applied by many countries on the purpose of yielding more crops. This trend does not last long, however, as the mutation also happens among the insects, weakening its effectiveness. Over these years, a vicious circle has been created, where stronger pesticide has to be invented over a certain period to fight against mutating insects. As a result, aside from the harvest that might contain toxic chemical residuals from the pesticide, now farmers have to deal with not only the poisonous components that can also pollute rivers or other water sources, but also the gene-adjusted insects that immune to pesticide, even the original scientific progress in this products is innovative, the accumulated damage it has been made is so large that people might wish that it is never invented at all.
To sum up, progresses in reality is not always good even in the name of technology or science. More attention is needed to supervised the innovation of
technology in case it is used for selfish profits at the cost of other people's or our offspring's benefits. The same goes with scientific progresses, which
might be good at first, but its side effects can gradually play a vital role on deteriorating our environment or our health.
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- TOEFL Writing Test Test 1 2022 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...hat make our lives better can sometimes brings up undesirable consequences. Ever since...
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Suggestion:
...surviving rate and reduce uncertainty in hazardous jungles, we human being keep d...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun rooms is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...eir recovery rates and eventually leave less rooms for our future generation to be p...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , with
...troubles in the near future. Second,with the support of scrupulous research and ...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ven the original scientific progress in this products is innovative, the accumulated...
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Suggestion:
... wish that it is never invented at all. To sum up, progresses in reality is not ...
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...s needed to supervised the innovation of technology in case it is used for selfi...
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...upervised the innovation of technology in case it is used for selfish profits a...
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...e goes with scientific progresses, which might be good at first, but its side eff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, second, so, then, well, after all, as to, for example, no doubt, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2938.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41068139963 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98217808088 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 212.727598566 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58379373849 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 916.2 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.6490394307 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.222222222 100.406767564 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1666666667 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21815055954 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737097552417 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989200442824 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122735330798 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107113213089 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.69 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 167.0 86.8835125448 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.