Having less salary and success job is better than high salary and insecure job. agree or disagree?
Every person wants to get success in job with high salary. Some people more preference gives to success job because of its guarantee, however I prefer high salary job whether it is secure or not. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, high income means chance to fulfill our dream. One author says that money can’t buy everything but everything needs money. If person save money then, obviously he reach to his goal. For instance, ten years ago, my cousin went Mumbai to seek new job. He gave lots of interview but no one job offer satisfied salary. One day he got job in call centre. He knew that no guarantee of the job but at least he tried to save plenty of money to open photo shoot shop. In six month, he saved three lakh rupees. Still he worked in call centre and side by side he find the new location for photo shop. One year after he lose job because company hired new employee. He earned huge money from the job. He started focus on open in photo shop. Finally, one year effort he open photo shop. In fact, now he earns triple money in photography as compare to his previous job. Accordingly, I believe that high income is one option to save money and make better future rather than stick less salary job which is only fulfill fundamental requirement.
Secondly, I mostly interested in new job to getting the knowledge and experience. Stick with one job I feel boring, however new job surging my curiosity working in various kind of field. In modern world, people find easily job but that job is insecure. Whatever, I concerned only about getting experience and knowledge, so I easily met the job with high salary. My experience compelling this idea, being pharmacist, two years ago, I worked in pharmacy store as pharmacist. After six month I left my job and started worked in medical representative in which I met lots of people and it helps to increase the social networking. After nine month, I start working pharmaceutical industry as manager in drug analysis department and still I work in company. In whole my career I grasp huge knowledge of various kind of field and it also gives me experience. Every industry and company needs employee who has experience and knowledge. I have both qualities, therefore I m not worry to insecure job but I interested in money.
In conclusion, although many people prefer less income with secure job because of less stress and easy work, I prefer high income job whatever it secured or not because of huge money assist to completes my aspire, and working in different field I acquire enormous knowledge and experience.
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- Integrated essay. ETS OFFICIAL TOEFL iBT TEST-4 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'reaches'.
Suggestion: reaches
...If person save money then, obviously he reach to his goal. For instance, ten years ag...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
... six month, he saved three lakh rupees. Still he worked in call centre and side by si...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 571, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...rked in call centre and side by side he find the new location for photo shop. One ye...
^^^^
Line 2, column 627, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loses'.
Suggestion: loses
...ation for photo shop. One year after he lose job because company hired new employee....
^^^^
Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...pharmacy store as pharmacist. After six month I left my job and started worked in med...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...rease the social networking. After nine month, I start working pharmaceutical industr...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'complete'.
Suggestion: complete
... or not because of huge money assist to completes my aspire, and working in different fie...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, at least, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68172043011 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54858762425 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.5812117036 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0689655172 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0344827586 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06896551724 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28803767165 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07967291978 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821556561061 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18764859571 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506888425618 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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