hobbies for children
Providing enough hobbies for children and the fulfillment of children's time is one of the most important concerns of parents. Some people believe that when parents do not have enough time to spend with their children, they should let their children have fun playing, while other people intensely disagree with this idea and suggest that the children should do their homework to spend that time. I strongly agree with the later statement that parent should let their children use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two different outstanding reasons.
The first ground coming to mind to substantiate my standing point is concerned with the matter that children may harm themselves by playing games and sports without the presence of parents. It is evident that today's children watch many action movie and sports which are full of violent and most of them are affected by these movies and games. Hence, if there are no parents to take care of them and observe their playing, children may hurt themselves by playing dangerous sports and games. For example, when I was a child, some of my friend and I were alone at my home. Then we decided to hold a boxing race between each other to challenge our power. When the races finished, I went in front of a mirror to see my face. When I saw myself, I shocked because my face was full of green spot which was originated from the received hits in the race. Hence, It is obvious that how much it can be dangerous to let child play together without the care of parents.
Another equally remarkable cause is that as parents are busy most of the time; hence, their children do not have enough time or willing to do their homework. When parents are busy too much, they let their children play games or sign their children in different sports clubs to fulfill their time; hence, a huge portion of their children's time is spent on things that are irrelevant to their children's school. It is obvious this issue will weaken children's in school. Also, they will become reluctant to go to school. Because the attractiveness of sports and games, children’s enthusiasm to read lessen will decrease. Hence, they do not have any willing to do their homework.
Based on the discussion, it can be concluded that the best things children should do when their parents are busy, is doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...g reasons. The first ground coming to mind to substantiate my standing point is concerned with the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80424528302 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45763204684 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466981132075 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2261665369 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.210526316 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31578947368 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247959424632 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794279839002 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105736770286 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147563161838 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078638831488 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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