There is no doubt that nowadays, education plays the key role in people's lives. No one can deny the direct and indirect effects of education. It is a no-brainer that well education can guide individuals to prosperity and success. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that the government should invest more money in education. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that other areas such as health care or land exploration should be more invested. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. I hold this because of two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that great education affects directly or indirectly to other areas such as health care. It goes without saying that to have acceptable health care, we should have educated doctors, as well as, sophisticated facilities to care diseases successfully and elevate the health level in the society. All of these are impossible without a comprehensive education, so to make progress in all areas, we should first have a cultivated education system. To shed light on this issue, sociologists claim that the main key factor of development and progress in South Korea is an excellent education system. They believe that this system helps South Korea to have sweep changes in other areas such as well-being, business, health care and so on, over the course of time.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that a good education system increases the public's general knowledge, which leads that they oversee more on the government. To have a responsive government, members of society should have knowledge about their rights. People who are illiterate or unaware are more susceptible to have a tyrant government. As a case in point, what makes the South Korea democratic and North Korea dictatorship is nothing but their people's knowledge about their rights. Had North Korea had a good education system, the government would not have become a tyrant.
To make a long story short, all the aforementioned above lead us to the conclusion that investing money in the education system has a lot of benefits that outweigh the benefits of investing in health care or land exploration because it affects all areas and escalates public awareness. All in all, it is anticipated that governments pays more attention to education in the future because of its momentous benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng essay. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, so, well, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12807881773 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80588901718 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5318531052 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.578947368 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215651266212 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627048630211 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547496788408 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136128580618 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537684979479 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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