if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
In today's progressive and sophisticate world where we live, finding a suitable career, it is a vital part of our life. Different ways can consider having a proper secure job in the future. In this line of thought, some people believe that individuals should be patient in the process of finding the job to find employment, while many others posit this notion, stating that whenever people can find a safe position, they must catch it. I personally concur with the former group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, people who have a job in which interest, they are working better and having more impetus to improving productivity. In this modern era, a vital part of every individual is their job; if a person does not satisfy with his career, they will not work every day and have energy donated to work. Therefore, a person who does not enjoy his car; he is not spending time promoting work and has less productivity. For example, I have twins cousin, they have the same degree in pharmacist, and they are in the same circumstance growing, one of them after finishing a university started to working in the company, which got them a proposal, but another one waiting two years to find dream job until could establish the pharmacy. They always told others they wanted to have their pharmacy.
Secondly, people spend most of their life in the work environment, so they need to enjoy their work and be satisfied with their career. Not only must they go forward to find a profitable job, but they also should convert a post to a safe position. To be more specific, when folks merely think about the security of a job and ignore other aspects of duty, they feel bored and think it is a monotonous work, so they do not be satisfied.
To sum up, I assume that people should do endeavor to find a dream job which can satisfy them and do not think about the mere security of the situation immediately. Not only cause to develop in the job and make good progress in their life, but also make them enjoy and love their job and avoid away from bored. As for this writers' advice, I recommend adults seeking their dream job.
- if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. 70
- The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. do you agree? 76
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Do you agree? 66
- sound 80
- young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 88
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 324, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... and avoid away from bored. As for this writers advice, I recommend adults seeking thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as for, for example, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59897172237 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4618983108 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516709511568 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9968888144 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.266666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30422945705 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111788846978 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630423893398 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195182974305 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195322506746 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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