If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
In today’s modern world, by the growth of population and their demand for a mechanized life, traffic jam and air pollution has become two major problems in most big cities. Tehran, my hometown, is one of the biggest cities in the world that has been suffering from both heavy traffic jam and air pollution in recent years. Consequently, these concerning problems make me change the transportation system in order to lighten the disruptive traffic jam, and restrict dispersion of pollutants in to the air, if I would be able to change one.
These days, traffic jam through Tehran is quite a familiar problem to everyone who lives in it. Every day, heavy traffic jams, besides making people breath a large amount of pollutants, which are dispersed into the atmosphere, leads quite a few people whether old or not/or otherwise in to the hospitals. In spite of these terrible conditions, through using their own cars rather than using public transportation facilities for traveling, most people intensify these critical conditions.
In spite of this fact that using public transportation systems such as the subway and buses lessens air contamination and traffic jam issues, some big problems arise which cause the rejection of such systems by most people. Irregularity and lack of proper and decent public services are two important reasons for the already mentioned objection, which are improvable by an active and responsible management for this system.
By taking into account all the above mentioned factors, we reach the conclusion that improving the public transportation system not only brings about people to be attracted by such comfortable and cheap facilities, but also helps people lighten traffic jam and subsequently, refine the polluted atmosphere of the city, which is the main source of respiratory diseases.
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 75
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 68
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation 67
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Books are not needed any more because people can read information on computers 87
- Do you agree or disagree If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'consequently', 'if', 'so', 'such as', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.28 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.12 0.158761421928 76% => OK
Adjectives: 0.126153846154 0.0866891130778 146% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0307692307692 0.046263068375 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0215384615385 0.0685040099705 31% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132307692308 0.118717715034 111% => OK
Participles: 0.0430769230769 0.0351676179071 122% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88165548881 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0184615384615 0.0309702414327 60% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0953846153846 0.0887237588012 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00307692307692 0.0209618222197 15% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0184615384615 0.0139019557991 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1832.0 2387.08602151 77% => OK
No of words: 292.0 408.028673835 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.27397260274 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.48200974243 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.400684931507 0.338922669872 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.280821917808 0.251872472559 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.191780821918 0.174417080927 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154109589041 0.112833075102 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88165548881 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595890410959 0.524397521467 114% => OK
Word variations: 65.0447815491 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6684587814 44% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 32.4444444444 20.5533526081 158% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0491890666 48.84282405 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 203.555555556 120.699889404 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4444444444 20.5533526081 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.644075263715 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 60.5266362253 45.7405998639 132% => OK
Elegance: 2.64285714286 1.45489161554 182% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.093553126594 0.300154397459 31% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.162590825894 0.103427244359 157% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0698591550227 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.687318225135 0.497263757937 138% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142598533574 0.151897553556 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501044369348 0.114077575197 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049087659893 0.0781384742642 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.273451778875 0.336927656856 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0703681080147 0.067059652881 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0613793045255 0.210909579961 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380131203637 0.0618886996521 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8870967742 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 8.42114695341 24% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 13.6433691756 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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