If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would
you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
There is a popular saying that “one must value his roots”. For many people, roots often lead to moments that are cherished their formative years in hometown. Due to existential setup, typically many move out of it for various reasons leaving many things behind. For me, multiple things at my hometown had to be set right. One major thing is the education for the poor. Education, the backbone of the development of any country is quite ignored at my hometown. This is mainly due to stereotyping, social mileu and past experience.
Man is a social animal and often finds comfortable enough to leave in collective setup among other co-individuals. At times people are bound to peer pressure and tend to obey what is actual heard and instructed to them. Similar is the case in hometown. Children at my hometown are deprived of basic education because parents believe education has no role in one’s life. Society is deep rooted with a thought of hierarchical structure in the society. For instance, people at my hometown believe that a child of a sweeper has nothing to do with basic of education. This is blatantly unfair and foolish belief that people are following from ages. The present generation is still unaware about the detrimental effects of such a devastating setup.
Stereotypic is the major concern what stops people from doing what has to done right. Professions are believed to be carried out to their next generations without a second thought. A peon with a no second thought dwells with an assumption that his child will be peon in future. What people do not understand is, the power of education. At my hometown, people out rightly abandon any rebels and this has led hindrance of development at my hometown which still pricks me even though it’s 21st century. Stereotyping does not stop at lower or middle class families but extends amazingly well to the all strata of the society including the upper class. A businessmen at my hometown posits graciously in the society his child will look forward his business and has no necessity of the education. Such scenario has to stop and people must awake from the misconception state with immediate effect.
Also, over the past, unfortunately many experimentation in quite a few families have turned out to be disastrous. Not many were capable of affording the quality education and the risks so involved with respect to money. Though government has set up a school and college at my hometown, it’s always the private colleges that were winners. Past experience says that government school teachers and the setup was ineptitude at various levels and not many could afford the quality education. This also forms the major part for the deprivation of the education to the budding children of the hometown.
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- Altruism 3
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- If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what wouldyou change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. 73
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should nevermake an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to supportyour answer. 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 524, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...y due to stereotyping, social mileu and past experience. Man is a social animal and often fi...
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Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... assumption that his child will be peon in future. What people do not understand is, the ...
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Line 7, column 654, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A businessman' or simply 'businessmen'?
Suggestion: A businessman; Businessmen
... the society including the upper class. A businessmen at my hometown posits graciously in the...
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Line 11, column 36, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experimentation seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much experimentation', 'a good deal of experimentation'.
Suggestion: much experimentation; a good deal of experimentation
... Also, over the past, unfortunately many experimentation in quite a few families have turned out...
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Line 11, column 344, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: Experience
...the private colleges that were winners. Past experience says that government school teachers an...
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Line 11, column 602, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o the budding children of the hometown.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, so, still, well, as to, for instance, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01287553648 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78549699957 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519313304721 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8098182072 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4285714286 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92857142857 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.085297056448 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269959395019 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264495245842 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576618527406 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205444697355 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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