If you could change one thing about your job, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your response.
One thing that I would change about my job, if I had the power to do that, would be the equipment offered by the hospital where I work in my city to perform ophthalmological surgeries on my patients.
Working as a doctor and performing ophthalmological surgeries on my patients, I am always searching for excellence in the results. However, as time passes equipment becomes old-fashioned and I need new equipment with new technologies to achieve better results and make patients happy with the results. So, it is necessary to invest in new technology for better results.
Another point in ophthalmology is that surgery is the result, and the result makes the patients happy and satisfied. So, with updated equipment, I can perform surgeries with more precision and success.
Finally, to perform procedures with the equipment offered by the hospital, when I have to do more than one surgery in the same morning, for example, it takes a long time to perform them. So, with the new equipment, I can avoid a long time of each procedure and diminish the interval of surgeries.
In conclusion, in my work as an Ophthalmologist, I always search for excellence in results for the patients. So, in a hypothetical situation, I would like to change the equipment offered by the hospital because that way I could offer better results to my patients and fewer complications during the procedures.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 233.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96566523605 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14363546827 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 212.727598566 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480686695279 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1020606915 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.7 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0716408353949 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280805006515 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539726417043 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501871792636 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636967958137 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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