Imagine that you are planning to take a vacation and are trying to decide between two places to visit. Which of these two options do you believe would give you better information about making your choice? Why?
۱٫ Reading about the places online
۲٫ Discussing them with someone you know who has visited both places
Nowadays, people spend the majority of their time at work. They work 8 to 12 hours a day. So everyone needs a vacation to get away from this hectic life. There a lot of places for visiting so it is hard to choose what place is the best destination for holiday, sometimes we stuck between two of the destination. There are two ways to solve our dilemma, first, read about the places online or talk to someone who has visited both places before. As I am concerned, I prefer using on resource to get my information. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that online resource provides us a great verity of information with a lot of details. You can read about the place you want to from many sites. This sites also provide you the photo of your destination in order to give a chance to better decisions about your destination. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. Every time I want to go to a new city. I search on the internet the title of the places I want to go. Last summer we decided to travel Esfahan city with my family. I was responsible to plan and organized our trip. I gained a lot of information through different sites. I found a lot of pictures of outstanding historical buildings and bridges that I have never seen before. This city had a lot of place for visiting but we have not enough time to visit all of them. I convinced my family that we should see the famous tourist attraction place that every passenger should see. So, using this information helped us managed our time in an appropriate way.
Another reason that deserves some words is that on the internet you can read the opinion of a thousand people about two destinations instead of just ask your friend. You can also compare many notions together, it gives you an opportunity to select your destination according to a lot of ideas. Back to the previous example, I hesitated between two journey’s end, so I determined to read the opinion of other tourists that before seen these cities to make my final decision. In spite of at first I decided to go Yazd but when I read some comments of people I changed my choice because many of visitors had a lot of compliments of Esfahan city. After our journey I shared my memories of this beautiful city with a lot of joyful with my friend but he had different experience of his trip to these cities several years ago and if I wanted to judge base on his notion certainly I had decided another decision while that was one of the best experience of my life. Therefore, we have to make choice according to a lot of people not only one that internet gives us this chance.
By the way of conclusion, I am of the opinion that reading about places online is the best way out of our dilemma because provide us a lot of information and details about our journey destination with related pictures also, we can aware of others people opinion by reading their comments about the places.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 645, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f information through different sites. I found a lot of pictures of outstanding ...
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Line 2, column 1006, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... information helped us managed our time in an appropriate way. Another reason that deserves some wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, by the way, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 52.1666666667 180% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2460.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48905109489 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60706589551 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461678832117 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9154692433 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1111111111 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2962962963 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.48148148148 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287357887949 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737657857785 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833405849382 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181030039533 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252203783272 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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