Imagine that you have been given the opportunity to advise the government of a city or region (area) that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region. Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or region? Why?
-Providing more affordable housing
-Reducing air and water pollution
-Attracting new businesses to the city or region
The policy run by the government is of vital importance for the development of a country or region: dealing with environmental problems can provide not only citizens but also animals with fresh air and clean water; offering people living in the cities affordable housing can ensure that everyone has their own shelters; attracting new business can create more jobs for city-dwellers. From my perspective, in terms of benefiting the whole city or region most, attracting new business should be given a priority.
First, attracting new business can create more jobs in the cities and thus improve citizens’ living standard because in order to run a company, its boss has to hire employees to work. Meanwhile, local people can be employed by them and thus get paid; Furthermore, people can also enjoy the welfare brought by those companies. Take the case of Shanghai, a widely recognizable city of China that has attracted a number of exotic companies, as an example. In recent years, Tesla has been attracted by Shanghai, setting up its company and hiring hundreds of local people to work for them. In addition, it also helps each employee to purchase the medical insurance so that its workers can be supported when they are hurt. J.P Morgan has been also attracted by Shanghai, recruiting people who major in Finance or Economy and providing them with free apartments. As a result, thanks to the increasing number of foreign companies, an increasingly number of people’s life has been changed tremendously.
Second, more exotic businesses can also benefit the government. As a matter of fact, government can receive taxes from those businesses and thus spend them on something of greater significance, like constructing more lines of subway, building up more shelters for people, offering more grants for people who just lose their jobs and so on. With more exotic businesses being attracted, more taxes can be gained by them and hence the whole social-welfare will be refined. In this case, a virtuous cycle can be created.
Admittedly, a voice arises that reducing air and water pollution can decrease the number of people or animals that suffer from serious health problems caused by heavy pollution in water or air. Additionally, providing more affordable houses enables more people to find a shelter. Ironically, in order to achieve these, governments are required to take years and a large portion of its fiscal budget, which might exert a heavy economical burden on themselves, not to mention that those policies are not as sustainable as attracting more businesses. Since with more people getting paid, they are indeed capable of purchasing houses themselves without any additional policy and taxes gained from foreign companies can be exploited in environmental protection.
In a nutshell, for the purpose of benefiting the whole country most, appealing more exotic companies should be prioritized.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, thus, well, while, as to, in addition, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23240938166 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86235720602 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513859275053 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.6019611707 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.333333333 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0555555556 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163839618203 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604000917944 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454365696334 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112335617789 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471496549605 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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