Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
One the most crucial aspects of a human being's life is having a job. It gives us purpose, direction and the money will supply us with our requirements. If I intend to donate money to a charitable organization, I would rather give it to one that helps people to establish their own minor business. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it is crystal clear that in today's world, money is the solution to almost everything. It buys us food, medicine and medical care, help you provide yourself with a roof on top of our head, and etc. One is not going to be able to build a comfortable life for himself/herself and his/her loved ones by accepting a one-time given money from a charity. In other words, neither the problem of housing and food nor the issue of receiving medical help would be fixed due to the fact that an organization cannot support a poor family forever. Therefore, it is an eligible act to come to the aid of people that demand help to commence their business.
Second, many people will have the opportunity to be employed in the above-mentioned new-born businesses if we decide to donate our money to an organization which provide the poor to start their career. As a result, the rate of unemployment decreases, allowing a score of people to buy products and services using money they earned with hard work. For instance, me and my family donated the money needed to rent a space for a workhouse with the supplements for making wooden chairs and tables. Then, we recruited a carpenter to teach the job people introduced by the charity. After some time, the workers spreaded to teach others the job. Eventually, there was a vast network of carpenters, comprised of people who were one day in need of a cent.
To sum up, I concur the idea that we ought to donate money to people who need it to start their business, because people need a stable flow of money into their lives to support their families (which is having a job), and because small business can grow to help other unemployed people to earn money and as time passes, there will be less and less people in need.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...One the most crucial aspects of a human beings life is having a job. It gives us purpo...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ourself with a roof on top of our head, and etc. One is not going to be able to build a ...
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Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e for himself/herself and his/her loved ones by accepting a one-time given money fro...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... as time passes, there will be less and less people in need.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, therefore, for instance, as a result, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58354755784 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62201975758 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532133676093 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0025669172 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4375 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352433059321 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994795351939 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680832552516 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211911221902 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324365687871 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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