Independent essay
Making new friends thoughout all spehere of life is indeed part of human nature. Although some
believe that maintaining bond with old friendsis imperatuve, but I think to make new friends
is more important for few reaons help in emergency and exchange plethora of knowledge:
First,adding new friends to the network is crucial in case of harsh cirumstances as
suggested by famous proverb "that friend in need is a friend indeed." My own personal
experience is compelling example of this. When I came to United States to pursue my
futher education in Masters of Business Administration in health care in the year 2015,
I hardly knew anyone in Findlay Ohio. One day when I went to my university library I
saw native american girl sitting over there, I went to talk with her. Fortunately, we
talked on daily basis as she was genuine and became good friends. All of a sudden one day
I was experiencing severe abdominal discomfort, being anxious I called her to reveal my
problem. She reponsed immediately, and came to my home to take me to hospital. Because of her
I was provided with prompt medical attention and my symptoms subsided and disappeared. As a result, she saved my life and our friendship became strong. On the other hand, my
old friends mostly are from overseas countries they can not help me in this critical condition.
Second, making new friends who are different from us open up oppotunity to learn. As,
discussion with new friends help to barter information and thereby enhancing knowledge.
For example, when I arrived in United States local idioms and phrases used in communication
were new to me, I have never encountered a situation where I need to use native slang before. Attending university allows me to make new friends and involve in discussion with them during
class especially. Daily intereactive question and answer sessions during classes helped me to
learn wide variety of vocabulary, phrases and idioms thus I started communicating with confidence with professors. Thus, making friends from different origin sets stage for me to expand my horizon
and reduce language barrier.
In conclusion, it is certainly true that making new friends bring concrete benefits in someone's life. It is worth saying that, new friends.
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...hip became strong. On the other hand, my old friends mostly are from overseas co...
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...r hand, my old friends mostly are from overseas countries they can not help me ...
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...from us open up oppotunity to learn. As, discussion with new friends help to bart...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13866666667 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87886891369 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605333333333 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.9392161782 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.055555556 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.53405017921 485% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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