With the fast development of technology, children are exposed to cutting edge technology which make them spend more time using electric products and playing computer games. Some claims that children nowadays are less creative than they were in the past because of the technology. As far as I am concerned, this opinion is arbitrary and unilateral. Children are more creative and competitive although they don't have enough stage to show their talents. My reasons and examples are given below.
Initially, modern technology allows children to extend their outlook and enrich their professional experience which make them more creative. Children can search everything on line and become an all-rounder even they never see the real thing. For instance, one of my friends is a talented coder. When he was 8 years old, it was his first time to know the computer programming. He just fell in love with it and started learning with C language. There were not even one people around him who occupied as a programmer. So he had to learn by using Google. Thanks to the communities like stack overflow and Github, he became one of the top programmers I have ever seen and the creator of the Bilibili Mac version.
Besides, modern technology make it easier for children to win the competitive edge in the future. As we all know, more technology creates abundant job opportunities and let children who cannot adapt to the traditional jobs have the chance to show their creative. Take Bill Gates as an example. Because of the invention of the computer, he was able to practice programming. If there were not that kind of technology, he would not grasp chances and stand out from the crowd.
Admittedly, I am not denying that technology make children spend a great deal of time using computers and smart phone. Some holds that they won't have chance to communicate with others that may let them become less creative. However, from my point of view, as long as they can balance the time between the technology and reality, there is nothing to worry about. I am sure children have the capability to get things done.
In a nutshell, I totally disagree with the idea that technology makes children less creative. It is not only because children can broaden their horizon and become more professional, but also because they can be more competitive and maybe one days achieve their dreams.
- TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 75
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- Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 9: Agree or disagree? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. 61
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 65
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... creative and competitive although they dont have enough stage to show their talents...
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Line 7, column 15, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...nd out from the crowd. Admittedly, I am not denying that technology make children spend a g...
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Line 9, column 239, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one day', 'a day', or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: one day; a day; days
... they can be more competitive and maybe one days achieve their dreams.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91791044776 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66029744493 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534825870647 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7871383389 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.375 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208986876796 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590704976331 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778516319593 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130243839471 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582017597055 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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