It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job or not
There is no doubt that nowadys, choosing a job is one of the most importat decisions in every individual's life. The ever-increasing prominence of this issue has engendered this question whether it is better for childrens to follow their parents career or start a new job. Some people cling to the idea that it is a very wise idea for children to begin their career which differs from their parents,while I am of the opinion that it is more rational for individuals to persue their parent's job. There are numerous rationals, two of which I will explore in what follows.
The first reason coming to mind is that by following their ancestors carrier, they could use from their experiences to be more successful in their job.In the way of illustration, when a person begin a new job, he has to learn every little thing by his own without any help. Therefore, it is more likely for this person to make a mistake in his job. Hence, when he follow his parents job, he can get lots of information from them and do his job in the best way. It is no secret that when an individual begin his career, while he is informed about avery aspects of his work, he could be a more successful person rather than one who start from zero without any knowledge and experience. My own experience is a compelling example of this reality. After college, I started my job in a school in our city as a teacher. I was paniced at first, because neither me had experience in teaching nor non of my family members. Thus, there was no one to advise me how to prepare for this career to have a better efficiency. On the other hand, parents of one of my colleagues who started her career on the same time with me in that school. Accordingly, she came to school totally prepared and well-informed, while I even did not know what kind of dress I should wear for the first day. There is no doubt that had my parents were teacher as well, I would have began my work more confidently like my colleague.
The second ground which deserves some words here is that when we follow our parents work, we could take the advantages of their career. In other word, persuing a family career could make us more well-known in our job and other people who related to our career could easily trust us. As a result, we could establish our work and be successful more easily. For instance, my father is a well-known architect in our city. My older sister, from an early age became interested in this feild of study. As a concequence, she chose the architecture as her major.After university, she began her career as a architet ,and very quickly she could take lots of projects thanks to name of my father. No one can deny the direct and indirect effects of trust of people in being succeed in our work.This example demonstrates this reallity that when we follow our parrents job, we have more chance to be successful.
On the whole, based on the points mentioned above, we can safly reach the conclusion that it is more logical to persue our parents work becuase in this way not ony we can use their experience in our job but also we can take advantage of their name to be well-known from the beginig.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, kind of, no doubt, as a result, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 95.0 43.0788530466 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2585.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 575.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49565217391 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57378730598 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453913043478 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.066329733 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.391304348 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30434782609 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281017020781 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879910588008 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949058705898 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207966414134 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134696421274 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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