Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for sometimes in the future?
As a person reaches adulthood, he needs to think on how and when would spend the money earned. While the vast majority of people think that spending the money while they are still young is the best decision, I think that a wiser alternative is to save the money for the future.
Firstly, spending all the money. On the one hand, if people does not save money implies that they could enjoy while they are young and they have the possibility to have many experiences in an early stage of their lives. However, on the other hand, spending all the money has some disadvantages, for instance, unlikely the people who has savings, they cannot buy a house or could not afford a medical emergency in the future.
Secondly, save for future. There are several reasons to consider a good practice to save money for example, despite of being a healthy person, there is always a chance of suffer an accident or a disease where we would need to have savings to afford it. Moreover, if we have a bulk of money saved we can think to buy some fancy things such boats, exotic travels etc. Like, spending all our money, saving too much has some disadvantages, for example, we have no certainty of living until become elderly.
Finally, considering the advantages and disadvantages above mentioned, I prefer to spend less money now and save more for the future, because I believe that I will live many years, therefore, I betting that I have time for save money and for spend it once that i get older . Moreover, I get excited when considering sharing my savings with my family (wife and kids) not just spending for myself.
- Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sport or other dangerous activities? 66
- How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? 73
- Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. 70
- What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? 70
- The twentieth century saw great change. In your opinion, what is one change that should be remembered about the twentieth century? Use specific reasons and details to explain your cho 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ow and save more for the future, because I believe that I will live many years, t...
^^
Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...that I will live many years, therefore, I betting that I have time for save money...
^
Line 4, column 263, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...r save money and for spend it once that i get older . Moreover, I get excited whe...
^
Line 4, column 274, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y and for spend it once that i get older . Moreover, I get excited when considerin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 286.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62237762238 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45962924197 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534965034965 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.6365297307 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.181818182 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4545454545 5.45110844103 247% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241872963153 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115818895057 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310939274335 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163599040876 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203133263124 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.