It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries.
Having a job impacts our life significantly. People need to work because they have a responsibility towards their families in particular and their community in general. Some people believe that it is better for people to work in a job that pays good money even if they did not like it. However, in my opinion, doing something we like the most is more important even if it pays less.
The first reason why I believe that working in enjoyable job is more essential is that it is stress-free. Like an old say says: If you do what you love, you will never have to work a day in your life. For example, ten years ago, right after I graduated from pharmacy college. I worked as pharmacist in Raheeg medical company, which was on of the top successful companies in my country Sudan. It was a high paid job that enabled me to afford a luxurious lifestyle such as owning a nice house, a brand-new car, along with other belongings. However, I was quite stressed to the point that I could not enjoy the money I had. In contrast, five years later, when I quit my job and worked as a wedding planner, which was my dream job since childhood, I was so happy and I did not experience any kind of stress at all. Even though I had to let go of my old high salary, I was over the moon with my new career. I was enjoying meeting with the brides and grooms and planning their big day.
The second reason why self-satisfaction is better than a high paycheck is creativity. When employees enjoy their job, they will be more passionate and creative and hence better work productivity. For instance, my youngest sister Sara, ten years ago, she worked for a low salary as an intern in one of the beauty magazines. Despite the fact that she did not make a good money, she liked her job and enjoyed being there around designers and learning from them. The work was quite hard, but she never complained because she was excited and wanted to learn more. after working as an intern for 2 years, her manager noticed how passioned she was. She promoted her to become the youngest fashion designer on the entire team. This would not have been possible if she did not work in a job she likes.
These examples demonstrate the advantages of having a low paid job that is enjoyable. Not only because it stress-free, but it also helps in creativity.
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- Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes On the other hand some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities If the opening of a large shopping center in your neighborhood were announced would you support or 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
- It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'say'?
Suggestion: say
...that it is stress-free. Like an old say says If you do what you love, you will never...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd grooms and planning their big day. The second reason why self-satisfaction ...
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'the fact'.
Suggestion: the fact
...in one of the beauty magazines. Despite the fact the fact she did not make a good money, she like...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...e was excited and wanted to learn more. after working as an intern for 2 years, her m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in contrast, in general, in particular, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44600938967 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55369392954 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523474178404 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4942896511 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.347826087 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4347826087 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240620822022 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691829991618 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521983055638 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138678101722 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487522340836 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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