“It could b e argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler. But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions. Which opinion do you agree with? In your essay, include supporting details.”
Since the beginning of time, men develop their ways of interacting with nature. In Africa, for example, people would scream in their neighborhood in order to call for a meeting. With the simple invention of the whisltle, they became able to call for their meetings without wasting much of their vocal energy. Like the whistle, many more innovations are associated to the evolution that is prevalent in the world. Technology has been created to simplify the work of humans, and many may argue that it favors them. Technology makes our lives easier and simpler because it enhances people's happiness and expose them to educative useful resources.
First, the integration of technological devices makes people feel happy to use materials they were not initially capable of using. When a device is equipped with pieces of technology, it becomes more appealling for usage. For instance, in Rwanda, people were frustrated with the idea of using communal buses. This is because taxi drivers used to set prices according to the way the client looks. That is, if a person is well dressed, the fare will be high. Patrick Buchana, a young entrepreneur in the field of computer science, developed a technology that sets the amount of money people should pay for using buses. He created a card that would take a uniform amount of money from the customer's bank account once he or she uses a bus. This innovation made the Rwandan community happier than they were before because everybody was able to take the bus and pay a fare that is fair and not fixed with bias.
Second, technology has allowed many people to access internet resources. In fact, the internet has many free resources, such as Khan academy, Kaplan, Coursera, etc, that people can use to learn . Many of these free resources are designed to provide education to people who are destitute or unable to access high quality education. The internet, which is a key technological innovation in the 21st century, makes it possible for people to exploit the available resources. One of my friend called Mark got a degree in management while he was studying online. His parents could not afford to pay his tuition fees but because of the internet he was able to learn and earn a degree freely and easily. (he was studing from home) Technology has positively transformed humans' lives by enabling them to access education easily.
In conclusion, technology has made life simpler than the way life was before the advancements of technology. People are able to access courses on the internet online when they cannot afford to pay for school fees. In addition, the bias of the community can be reduced thanks to technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...ted to simplify the work of humans, and many may argue that it favors them. Technology m...
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Suggestion:
...makes people feel happy to use materials they were not initially capable of using...
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Suggestion: .
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Suggestion: He
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92222222222 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61178327792 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5370646685 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.2916666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149002544631 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044606555457 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436320971297 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919003520874 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186742603145 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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