it is more beneficial ability whether to have only a few numbers of friends over a long period of time or communicate easily and find new friends
It goes without any shadowing of doubt that in this hectic life which beat dawn people and crush their souls, every individual need to have friends. Considering the before-mentioned requiring for every person, there is a heated controversy that it is more beneficial ability whether to have only a few numbers of friends over a long period of time or communicate easily and find new friends. I, personally, subscribe to the idea that the ability of making new friends are more beneficial for us. The very skill helps us to feel happy everywhere and every time. In addition, it brings us a priceless opportunity to broaden our perspective.
To begin with, it is a common occurring for everyone that sometimes they are in the force of leaving their living-city and go to a new one. It is sometimes a good way for people to see a prosperous life in their future. For instance, the individuals that live in small towns need to migrate to a big city which provide them with an innumerable job conditions or high prestige universities. Considering such an avoidable occurrence as far as people are concerned about thriving life, the people can deal with new situations only if they are able to communicate with new people, especially with different culture, get along with them and make friendship. For instance, I remember the time when I had attended to university in a foreign country. Even though my university has many facilities and was among top universities around the world, I was very sad in the first semester. I used to think that people have to keep their friends as a long-term property, and they do not need to make new friends. Such an opinion was the prime root of my sadness at the beginning of my new university because I was not able to socialize with new individuals. After passing a really depressed time, I tried to adopt new skill by which I eventually became a person who could find new friends. This alteration in my point of view helped me to be success not only in my private life, but also to be a successful person in my education thanks to happiness that had been brought by my new friends.
Secondly, in this sophisticated and complicated world where we live, individuals always must improve their viewpoints in order to cope with all aspects of their life. As we know, every new person whom we socialized opens a new window toward the world for us. Friends are more likely to help us to meet such a desire, seeing the world differently, since we spend most of our free time with them. An example can drive this notion home. I used to be an inactive person and often prefer to be motionless. Most of my close friends were like me. When we gathered in a place, we do nothing except watching movies or talking together. The very my characteristic has had numerous negative impacts in my life. For example, I could not get a promotion in my job because I was not an energetic person in my boss's eyes. I could not find my problem until I familiarize with a new boy who was an artist and athlete. After a while, his life-style brings me a lot of knowledge about my weakness, in fact; he improves my perspective by which I really change my way. I can say with utmost confidence if I had not had ability to communicate with new people and only have relationship with my previous close friends, I would have definitely been a failure person.
In summary, with taken all this into account, I do believe that the skill of making new friendship outweigh to the ability of keeping our friendships over a longer period of time. Individuals can thrive their future life and enrich their viewpoint only just they are able to find new friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ly a few numbers of friends over a long period of time or communicate easily and find new frie...
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Line 8, column 165, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...f keeping our friendships over a longer period of time. Individuals can thrive their future li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, in summary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3013.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 652.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62116564417 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05314661074 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75216588959 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 212.727598566 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469325153374 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 978.3 618.680645161 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6729112952 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.896551724 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4827586207 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58620689655 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258969060384 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744515519494 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127380485761 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20932217097 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137562256696 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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