Some might say it is important to make new friends rather than holding on to the old friends you have as they might say new friends provide you more company and have more social interactions. However, i strongly think that we should hold onto the old friends rather than making more new friends. I believe so because of the following reason.
Firstly, the quality of friendship that you have with the old friends is much higher than that you will have with the new friends. Old friends they have known you for very long period of time and they know your character and your perks. They know what you have been through life and have experienced a lot of things together with you. For example, i personally have few old friends but the bond we share is just of another level. There is no hesitancy between us as i know them and they know me from the atom. They accept me as i am and don't need to be a different person just to be with them. I had this new friend i met in my class and we became friends but the thing with him was i couldn't be myself in front of him. Thus, for me, it is the quality of friends that is necessary rather than the quality of new friends.
Secondly, old friends are more reliable than the newly made friends. They will help you even in the condition is very difficult for them. For example,recently i've had an incident when my bike tires went flat and i was very late for the job interview. So, i contacted many new friends because they were near from that area. But every one of them made an excuse for not helping me and then i called one of my old friend who was at his job but despite being very busy, knowing that i had this important interview he called off from work and came as soon as possible even he was far away. That day, i realized the old friends are the one you should trust and you can always rely on, i am grateful to have such quality old friend who help me in the time of need.
In conclusion, choosing between keeping the old friends and making new friends is a complex task as old friends might not be present for you at all the times because of the change in the life. However, i still contend that keeping old friends is far more important than making new friends as they are the one whom i can always rely on without any hesitation and i know that my old friends think the same way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.21603563474 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18157330998 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427616926503 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4644373653 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6315789474 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6315789474 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439022650904 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156427023851 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14770960547 0.0737576698707 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335125942578 0.150856017488 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131538067506 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.43 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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