Many people believe that it's very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living.
Some people want to make large amounts of money, others wish to satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Money is the one of the essential parts in this modern society, like we need love and friendship to live. Why some people try to be rich? My answer is that they feel insecure if they don't have large amounts of money. From one angle see, it is true. if you're rich one and when your loved one gets sick,you don't have to worry about how much it will cost cause you can afford it. In my country, it's so practical. The rich people usually live longer, the poor, in contrast, they leave this world earlier.
I think, in this country, people often replace their health with money. They work hard all day and all night to earn money but in the end they lose their health. Again they use money to buy drugs to be healed. I believe that's not life. They don't have enough time to spend with their family. Earning a lot of money is not important.
For me, I want to use certain amount of money, not much, create a comfortable, happy and healthy life. In my imagination, using my earned money , living along a beach with my loved one. Every night next to the beach, I want to read books, listen to my favourite music and sipping the wine. In the dawn, I would like to jog around and do some yoga for my health. It doesn't matter to me get high salary, what matters to me is to do my favourite job and that I enjoy doing it.
To sum up, in order to be happy, you don't need to have money. Even though you are paid not well, you can taste the life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, i think, in contrast, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.1644295302 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.01368346219 2.67179642975 75% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563758389262 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9046102514 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 59.0952380952 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.1904761905 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95238095238 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193185729342 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662036207329 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113205055088 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10281107867 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727894799968 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.3 11.7677419355 45% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.26 10.9000537634 57% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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