Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes. On the other hand, some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities. If the opening of a large shopping centre in your neighbourhood were announced, would you support or oppose its construction? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Building a new market will directly affect local citizens’ lives in many ways. Personally, I feel that It will definitely improve their life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, These days our region is estimated by the low-income district in the whole capital city so the constructing new mall will significantly decrease the unemployment number and it will also positively influence on our economy. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has profoundly influenced by my personal experience. Two months ago, the new mart built-in near my home and at that time I was looking for a part-time job which had a fairly good salary and working good condition. However, a lot of restaurant and cafes refused to hire me, thus I was almost hopeless. Fortunately, one day I heard about a new centre was seeking for new employees and I applied to the job as a cashier which had really good salary compared to my workload. As a result, now I go to my university in the morning, then I go to my job in the afternoon, so I can handle myself without any burden put on my parents’ shoulders.
Secondly, the mall’s taxes will spend on our neighbourhood’s infrastructure improvement and other projects such as parks and schools. As a matter of fact, I am not live in the affluent district which has sufficient social services and public stations and parking a lot. Before the opening of the new mall, our living-condition has not been as good as now. Drawing from my experience, there was a lot of traffic jam on the adjacent bad condition road and I spent almost four hours per day for just only get to my home. Nonetheless, thanks to the new shopping centre, the mayor can conduct a new infrastructure project and this new double road helps me to spend more time with my family. Additionally, there have built some parks where I can stroll with my friends and my family and I don’t need to worry about where I park my car.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that building a new mall will certainly increase inhabitants’ income and this is because it leads us to rank in the top of district in the capital city for a lot of improvements compared to other poor districts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun restaurant seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of restaurants'.
Suggestion: a lot of restaurants
...ry and working good condition. However, a lot of restaurant and cafes refused to hire me, thus I wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66582914573 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02640668046 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545226130653 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3758782129 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0625 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.625 5.45110844103 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0520663682608 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0194711916367 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0199873607663 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0335939895728 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132917594045 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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