Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that take part-time job has a lot of social and psychological benefits for teenage children. Thus, from the past to present, parents always encourage their teenage children to have a part-time job. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that teenagers should not waste their time for any job rather than study for school courses, because the most important thing that determines the success of them in the future would be good grades at school. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
First and foremost, a part-time job has a positive effect on the socialization process of teenagers. For example, when I was 16 years old, I was working in a veterinary clinic. In this clinic I worked with five other people, it was a valuable experience to me because I learn teamwork and I found out that how a respectful communication would be beneficial for the progress of the group aims. In addition, this part-time job not only improved my self-confidence, but also was assisted me to involve in discussions at school.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that through a part-time job children practice financial independence. Unfortunately, today a lot of young people are still dependent on their parents for financial support. They did not learn to be responsible for own life. However, a part-time job would be a good opportunity for children to understand how making money is important and enjoyable for everyone.
Finally, yet importantly, a job experience can power person resumes for getting future job positions. It is a very positive factor in interviewers point of view, if you had a job experience during the teenage period of life. It shows that the applicant is a serious employee with appropriate social skills. For instance, my background work in a veterinary clinic was helpful for me to get a job in animal genetics lab after my graduation from university.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that parents by motivate their teenage children to take part-time job help them to be a more successful person in their future life. Because of a part-time job can improve social skills, responsibility, financial independence and provide them with powerful CV.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... involve in discussions at school. Another significant fact that should be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01228501229 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95354997098 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518427518428 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7449312994 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.333333333 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517278628991 0.236089414692 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169014150146 0.076458572812 221% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164959633454 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29481637189 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170657450595 0.0645574589148 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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