Teenage is a crucial time to build one's future. It is the time where a person should focus on career building, develop a strong personality, and spend time with family to learn the social value and so on. If a person spends all those time running after money that will not help him/her a lot in the future. So, I think parents should help their teenage children to prepare for their adult life instead of encouraging them to earn money for several reasons.
First of all, it is time for teenage children to focus on their study. If a child does not study enough and earn sufficient score that will hamper their further higher study. For instance, when I was a kid, my parents always encouraged me to study hard to fulfill my dream. From my early stage of education, I was good at mathematics and other science subjects. So, from my childhood, I dreamed about becoming an engineer. For this reason, I worked hard and got admitted to an engineering university. Without my parents encourage it would not be possible.
Secondly, parents should encourage to build a strong personality and value. Parents should teach their children that respect and recognition are more valuable than money. For example, my mother is a school teacher. Though she does not earn a lot, she is respected by her work. She taught me that earning money is easy but gaining respect and trust form others is hard to get. When I got government scholarship at the primary level, everybody appreciated my talent and I learn that respect is more important than money.
Finally, A part-time job would create distance from his family as they have to work and study simultaneously and it is really hard for children. For instance, one of my cousins worked as a delivery boy in a local newspaper. As he has to work, often time he was tired. For this reason, he failed to get a good result in the examination. Eventually, he failed to get admitted in a renown university.
In conclusion, working on a part-time job may have helped a student to get some money but it would not help to build his career and personality. So, parents should encourage their teenage children for preparation for their adult life in a good manner.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Teenage is a crucial time to build ones future. It is the time where a person s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69948186528 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62287756055 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492227979275 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5710821674 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5833333333 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346714617468 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099345096775 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118253259877 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2245303949 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135048383576 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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