One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
This is one of the controversial issues among people because the result of that determines their children' future lives. I completely disagree with that claim that stimulating children by parents to take a part-time job is an appropriate way to prepare children for adult life.
First, it is more likely to waste children’ time. Nowadays, finding a job becomes one of the people's difficulties because of the unsuitable economic condition in the world. This condition make employees prefer to hire a knowledgeable person.In this circumstance, children must spent most of their time for studying to enlarge their knowledge and learning practical skills. By these activities they can improve their chance for finding job in the future.
Second, another significant reason is that teenage children avoid from the mental disorders. All of us know the job enviroment is suitable for adult people who can easily suffer the problems of the job and adverse manners of people.So, parents must consider this fact that these difficulties in the job can afffect on children charachtor; which take shape in teenage age. These effects can completely change children behavior and makes thema hopelss and disappointed person. Thecorrect due of parents is preparing an enjoyable time for their children in this age to make them a happy person. Children should doing pleasure activites which gives them sufficient energy to prepare for adult life which bring a lot of difficulties for them.
Third, the way of the people's lives completely alters during the time. By emerging the technology such as the internet, smartphone, and television people face with a new way of communication. One example is the social groups which replace with the ordinary way of communication. The social groups provide an excellent opportunity for children to familiarise with new people who help them to see and experience beneficial things. For example, they have this chance to find new friends who are older than them, but they are prosperous in their lives. This friendship is a good way for them to learn how to become a successful adult. So, they do not need to go out and do some job to prepare for the adult life.
In conclusion, there are a lot of advantages such as saving time, avoiding from mental disorders and learning a right way of living convince us that it is better for the teenage children do not do a part-time job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04773869347 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82611497204 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497487437186 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3974294651 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.736842105 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.495703379789 0.236089414692 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148899014434 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927244442737 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292515198236 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849809169481 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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