The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Celebrities all over the world are famous from the past until now. A large number of people always have attracted them and follow their news and events about them. Some people may hold the view that famous people are more important for the Youngers than senior citizens. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. From my own perspective, the former belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that young people are always seeking for a role model in their life, hence the celebrities are the best choice for being a role model for them. They follow everything a celebrity does such as his cloth styling, his talking, and so forth. My own experience is a compelling reason for this. When I was a student, there was a singer in my country. I like a pop singer who was one of the famous singers. For a long-term, I did everything she did. I cut my hair like her hairstyle and put torn pants. I even imitated the way she talked.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that young people attract celebrities’ fame and success. Since celebrities have a prosperous and successful life, young people are willing to a person like them. Hence, they want to follow their career to get the crest of the life. For example, my cousin, an ambitious person in my family, brought up in a middle-status family, however, he is one of the richest ones not only in my family but also in my country. When he was in his in high school he sought to find a way to earn much money. Once a famous metallic band had the concert in their school and he talked with the leader of the band convinced them to be part of the band at the behind of the stage. After many years he got became a famous guitarist in the metallic music. He has reached a lot of fame and money by being famous.
In conclusion, this is my deep belief that not only are celebrities role model of young people but also they intrigue them to be a prosperous one in their life. Therefore, I highly agree that celebrities are more significant for the youngsters than old people.
- Some people offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. 60
- Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. 60
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job 70
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than they do similar tasks all day long. 66
- One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...rld are famous from the past until now. A large number of people always have attracted them and f...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly in my family but also in my country. When he was in his in high school he sought ...
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Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of the band at the behind of the stage. After many years he got became a famous guita...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5152284264 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54726380907 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507614213198 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1621290279 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.125 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142976557151 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416085015129 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656650243566 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1038681805 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499946653305 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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