Children are not able to manage money since they do not where it comes from. Some people suggest that parents should teach them how to use or spend their money in order to make them financially adults whereas others claim that parents should not let them use the money since they are too young to use it. I am of the opinion that parents should teach them how to use money when they are in the earlier years of their lives. In this essay, I am going to state my ideas with two arguments.
First off, children want to get everything that they see on the TV or a supermarket. They are not aware of how hard working circumstances, from which their parents earn money. In order to make them be aware of the hardships of managing the money, parents may limit their weekly or monthly budgets. This way, they have to be careful about spending money without thinking. For example, I would always want my father to give me money every day when I was in primary school. Since I would spend too much money in comparison with my friends, my father decided to allocate a weekly budget for me. Before that, I could get money whenever I want but after that, I had to learn how to manage my budget. Thanks to my father, I am very good at money management now. What I am saying is that parents should teach their children to make them more financially responsible by finding different ways.
Besides making responsible them, this may courage children to feel an individual. They will feel more adults and pay attention to their behaviors both in the house and outside. In addition, this will also encourage them to take responsibilities on other things such as helping house works or studying their classes more. My childhood is a compelling example of this. When I started to manage my weekly money, I felt that I was able to do many hard things and I would always share this with my parents. Apparently, they hit me from my weak side and stimulated my willing of being an adult. They told me that adults would care about their works and help other people especially their families. After that day, I started to help my mother to clean the house or buying some victuals from the grocery shop. Needless to say, I would care about my classes more than before.
To sum up, even though they are many negative effects of letting children use the money, I believe that it is really beneficial for children to learn how to manage it. This is because they will be ready for adulthood in terms of money management and this courage them to take responsibilities on other things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, first, if, may, really, so, whereas, for example, in addition, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52586206897 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40150427862 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456896551724 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8900694265 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70833333333 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196716175562 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065368053736 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471180981809 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143538319374 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449305927637 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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