Managing one's money, namely, finance management, is an indispensable skill for modern people. When it comes to whether children at young age should be taught how to manage their money, people hold different opinions. From some people perspective, learning this skill as early as possible is beneficial for children to become financially responsible people in the future. Contrary to their opinion is my viewpoint that it is not advisable for children to master how to manage money at a young age.
Among all the reasons why they are not suitable to learn finance management, the most important one is that they are too young to be competent to learn such a complex and advanced skill, which is even a challenge for excessive adults. Managing money means a child cannot purchase what they want. Otherwise, they may fail the process. However, most children are not competent to control their desire and on the contrary, they have a even stronger desire to make purchase of something when their parents do not allow them to buy. Consequently, managing money will render children upset and frustrated, leading to negative influence on children's mental health. For example, I have read a story in the newspaper, in which a little boy at the age of seven was required to manage his money well. The boy's mother demanded him to make records about every thing he bought and to evaluate whether the thing was worth buying or not. Sometimes. the boy was blamed by his mother owing to some toys, which were considered useless by his mother while loved by himself. Such a kind of conflict greatly contributed to the fact that the boy leaded a extremely frustrated life in his childhood. As a result, he failed to become a financially responsible person when he grew up, but a person who purchased everything he wanted.
In addition, another reason why children should not learn to manage money revolves around the stress suffered by parents. There is well-acknowledged that parents are the first teachers for youngsters, teaching their children the basic skills like eating, walking and speaking and introducing the social norms to their youngsters. All these tasks require parents a huge amount of time and energy, giving rise to the tiresome of parents. Hence, parents will undergo more pressure if required to teach children how to manage their money. Take the mother of one of my classmates Linda as an example. When Linda was eight, her mother started to teach her how to manage her money. Even her mother was patient and careful, Linda had hard time managing money successfully.
In conclusion, learning how to manage money do harm to both children and parents. So I oppose the children should learn how to manage money at a young age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to finance'
Suggestion: to finance
...sons why they are not suitable to learn finance management, the most important one is t...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r desire and on the contrary, they have a even stronger desire to make purchase o...
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Line 3, column 934, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ing was worth buying or not. Sometimes. the boy was blamed by his mother owing to s...
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Line 3, column 1131, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ributed to the fact that the boy leaded a extremely frustrated life in his childh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92640692641 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64305833995 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504329004329 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2690414489 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9565217391 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0869565217 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408139274327 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122202102338 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116203477143 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30060636307 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104760439466 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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