In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Children are the future of societies in the today's world. Some people are inclined toward the idea that children should learn how to spend their money at young age. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is not necessary for children to learn to manage their own money when they are at a young stage of their life. In my perspective, it is vital for adults to try manage their money at young age, in order to become financially responsible. In the following paragrapht, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason worth mentioning is that childrend experience how to be responsible in their future life. Nowadays, many people have a hectic life and financial problems since they spend most of their time on a full-time career. Therefore, people have to try hard for gaining income. Since children are living in their own world, it is crucial to teach them the importance of being responsible. For example, every parents can give their children chores to do like cleaning room and after that if they did their chore pay them money. Hence, children can understand that earning money is a difficult task for everyone and learn the importance of money.
A further more subtle point is that children learn how to spend their money which is extremly important for them in their adult life. Students who come to dormitory, are alone and away from their parent. They have to manage the money that their parent gave to them, to the end of the mouth. It will be a good practice for them how to save and expend their money which is useful for them in the future. Also, based on their amount of money, they have to make a wise plan for their cost. For instance, a person who has not a lot of money should thinks about his purchases.Therefore, he will learn how to divide his money for his purchasing.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are copious advantages for children to learn how to spend their money, for become more responsible in their future life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69273743017 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55194313854 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477653631285 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3177877687 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404007356227 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141865511679 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113911858818 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287279087729 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143484030699 0.0645574589148 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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