In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Some people are inclined toward the idea that adults should learn how to spend their money at young age. However, others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that it is not necessary for adults to learn manage their own money when they are at a young stage of their life. In my perspective, it is vital for adults to try to manage their money at young age, in order to become financially responsible. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason worth mentioning is that children learn the importance of currency. Nowadays, many parents have a financial problem since their income and expense do not math each other. Therefore, they should prevent the same situation happen for their children when they grow-ups and try to teach them not to waste their money. By this way children will learn the value of money. For example, parent give their children some indoor tasks such as cleaning room or putting out the garbage and they give their children price or money when they finished their assigned tasks. Hence, children learn earning money is not a simple task and require work.
A further more subtle point is that children become ready for their future life. Many people tend to leave alone and be responsible. It is an undeniable fact that children will leave their parents after a certain age. Therefore, it is an excellent experience for children to learn how spend their own money. For instance, a person who got accepted in a college or university will leave his parent and go to a dormitory. If he has knowledge about financial issue, he can easily spend his money because he know how to divide his money for a whole mouth. Therefore, he will not face many financial problem in his future life.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are copious advantages for children, to become more responsible in their future life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to manage'
Suggestion: to manage
...it is not necessary for adults to learn manage their own money when they are at a youn...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to earn'.
Suggestion: to earn
...r assigned tasks. Hence, children learn earning money is not a simple task and require ...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...e can easily spend his money because he know how to divide his money for a whole mou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85196374622 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48849819921 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513595166163 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3382372963 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2222222222 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3888888889 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441762027497 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141849607281 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107602740453 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26473698022 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124466932889 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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