It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and radically progressive era in which we live, human beings have always been involved in a great struggle to become healthier by playing sports and doing exercise. Whereas some individuals are inclined to play sports solitarily, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that taking part in group exercise like team sports are more beneficial to people. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with the second mental attitude, believing that playing team sports helps individuals more stay healthy. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be perspicuously substantiated by underlying and conspicuous reasons.
To commence with, it is crystal clear that one of the most paramount benefits of participating in sports groups is that people can improve their social skills such as making new friends, how to start a new conversation with an unfamiliar person and also making discussions, besides doing exercise. The mentioned factors really stay individuals especially adults in a good mood and help them not get disappointed and depressed during their life. However, if a person plays sport and does exercise lonely, he will not be able to have those parameters. An example can shed some light on this subject. My father goes jogging every morning with our neighbors. This issue actually makes him happy and pleasant because they enable to talk about the most important controversial topics in society and do exercise as well. To be more specific, I could remember that several years ago when he went running and jogging individually, he was not even able to find a new friend and always he was alone and upset.
Moreover, another advantage of doing exercise in a team group is that it stimulates all individuals to continue doing exercise without any stop. It is no secret to anyone that if any person has an accompanier in performing a task or playing sport, he will encourage to do that task very well with lots of motivation. As a matter of fact, this issue will obviously affect humans’ healthy because they will continue exercising. An example can derive this notion dramatically home. In the aforementioned example, when my father went jogging alone, he did not do it continuously and for most of the time, he stayed at home. However, form when he participates in sports groups, he unceasingly goes hiking, jogging, and several other sports with enthusiasm.
To wrap it up, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that it is more momentous and significant for almost all individuals to exercise together in a group. This is because they are able to enhance their social skills, find new friends as well as carrying out their job at all time without any pause or cessation.
- TOEFL T P O 47 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 41 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 34 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- You have long been friends with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with him or her? 73
- At work or school, you might encounter a problem that requires creativity -for example, you are given a task to complete that is very different from other tasks you do. In work or school situation that requires you to think creatively, would you prefer to 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...ask or playing sport, he will encourage to do that task very well with lots of motiva...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, well, whereas, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04301075269 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88560482866 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.292551372 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.421052632 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4736842105 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162585466324 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472963071796 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500223492934 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954441191858 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341108352381 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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