In our wold there are many celebrities and famous people who have their opnion that may influance others around them. The question is, whether those celebrities more important for young people than older or not. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some individuals believe that celebrities important to old people as important as to young people. Many old persons interested with watching sports, therefore they may admire with athletes of famous payer. But, in my opinion, yuongesters are more interested with celebrities opnion. In the following essay, I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my point of view,
First, and formost, young people know more about celebrities and famous people . This is mainly because, youngesters have wider social media than olders. kids and teenagers have many more familiar withtechnology and how to use smart devices like I pad and computer. Therefore, they have facebook and twitter from these application they can know ang hear about famous acter or athletes who may admire with and influence with his opinion. For example, my son like Cristiano. Therefore he passion with football games. My son always watch any foot ball match when this player play in it,, For me, when I was youner, I injoy watching football game and I have had my celebrity who I like him, but right know I do not interested with these games, therefore I do not know any sporter.
Furthermore, all celebriteies are youn people, they wear clothes which may be considered as a style and young people try to immitate them with their clothes, shoes and even with their cars models, This is because, many companies use these famous people to advertise their products. And as we know how is our kids interested with buying clothes and other products more than us.
In conclusion, This statement is as persuasive as it stands. This is nbased on exposition which mentioned above.
In our wold there are many celebrities and famous people who have their opnion that may influance others around them. The question is, whether those celebrities more important for young people than older or not. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some individuals believe that celebrities important to old people as important as to young people. Many old persons interested with watching sports, therefore they may admire with athletes of famous payer. But, in my opinion, yuongesters are more interested with celebrities opnion. In the following essay, I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my point of view,
First, and formost, young people know more about celebrities and famous people . This is mainly because, youngesters have wider social media than olders. kids and teenagers have many more familiar withtechnology and how to use smart devices like I pad and computer. Therefore, they have facebook and twitter from these application they can know ang hear about famous acter or athletes who may admire with and influence with his opinion. For example, my son like Cristiano. Therefore he passion with football games. My son always watch any foot ball match when this player play in it,, For me, when I was youner, I injoy watching football game and I have had my celebrity who I like him, but right know I do not interested with these games, therefore I do not know any sporter.
Furthermore, all celebriteies are youn people, they wear clothes which may be considered as a style and young people try to immitate them with their clothes, shoes and even with their cars models, This is because, many companies use these famous people to advertise their products. And as we know how is our kids interested with buying clothes and other products more than us.
In conclusion, This statement is as persuasive as it stands. This is nbased on exposition which mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99371069182 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6311792292 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553459119497 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.5641135256 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4117647059 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7058823529 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476417891351 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158050192521 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157942210561 0.0737576698707 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274146925203 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.205121865717 0.0645574589148 318% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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