The governments play important rule in enhancing welfare for general publics. Whether government should spend more money on arts rather than sport, this can be weighted in many aspects. In my opinion, government should fund more for sports to support athletics.
Admittedly, some believe that art is important to relief pressure of life and help for relaxation by attend exhibition or creating various kinds of art. But art only channel to release stress and sports are a better opinion for government to focus on.
First, when government spend money to support athletics, this will give them opportunity to train better , in addition they will have a good equipment that help them to increase their skills, furthermore, student do not have enough time to play their sport because they are always busy with their studying and doing homework, moreover, the school will help these kids to do their sport and become healthier people.
Second, when government funds for Olympic sports, and can be sponsoring of state team, this will give advantages to all residences in this state, especially when team state win races or any sport. All mpeople in this state will get benefit, this will encourage parent who want their kids to get ethletics as a career, and they will move to this country, in addition the stores which sell a sport brand will open in this place and people will be interested to buy their products, therefore this will benefit state not only economic growth, but also sports become prevalent in the state. Furthermore, this give state fame and statues and every one will be proud of his country even he did not do anything.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands, based on my exposition that mentioned above about my stand point, that government should support sports rather than arts, because this will make the country fame, and make people healthier.
The governments play important rule in enhancing welfare for general publics. Whether government should spend more money on arts rather than sport, this can be weighted in many aspects. In my opinion, government should fund more for sports to support athletics.
Admittedly, some believe that art is important to relief pressure of life and help for relaxation by attend exhibition or creating various kinds of art. But art only channel to release stress and sports are a better opinion for government to focus on.
First, when government spend money to support athletics, this will give them opportunity to train better , in addition they will have a good equipment that help them to increase their skills, furthermore, student do not have enough time to play their sport because they are always busy with their studying and doing homework, moreover, the school will help these kids to do their sport and become healthier people.
Second, when government funds for Olympic sports, and can be sponsoring of state team, this will give advantages to all residences in this state, especially when team state win races or any sport. All mpeople in this state will get benefit, this will encourage parent who want their kids to get ethletics as a career, and they will move to this country, in addition the stores which sell a sport brand will open in this place and people will be interested to buy their products, therefore this will benefit state not only economic growth, but also sports become prevalent in the state. Furthermore, this give state fame and statues and every one will be proud of his country even he did not do anything.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands, based on my exposition that mentioned above about my stand point, that government should support sports rather than arts, because this will make the country fame, and make people healthier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in addition, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94968553459 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45969864659 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562893081761 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.719880391 48.9658058833 242% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.4 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424305320559 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.244606897284 0.076458572812 320% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190662931814 0.0737576698707 258% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305765406797 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.292932537988 0.0645574589148 454% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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