It is often argued that in the past young people overly depended on their parents to make decisions while today's youths are more autonomous. Regardless of the disagreement, young people always need a reference to guide them in life and help them make plausible decision to reach their goals. Nonetheless, I believe today's youths take more independent decisions because they are more educated and have more connections.
In the past decades, education has become a prevalent entity in many countries. As such, many youths learned how to deal with different situations in life. They learned how to reach their goals through diligence and how they can use other's experiences who they have met in the high school or university. However, it was not the case in the past because in that era parents were their single source of information. Parents also did not have enough education to guide their children in every aspect. What the parents know was mostly came from their own experiences in a particular matter while the educational system gathered best cases in each area and taught them to our young people.
Nowadays young people are more connected to other people which allow them not to solely rely on their parents. They have access to the Internet so they can use many experts to help them make a decision. For instance, If a person wants to migrate to another country, his parents cannot help him much, but a person in the destination country can actually help him make a wise decision.
Overall, young individuals have access to education and different means of communication. As a result, they can use what they have learned in school or university. In addition, they have access to others experience through the Internet to make a decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, while, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98305084746 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6526457986 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515254237288 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.158378234 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.076923077 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335922106077 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123712379497 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131991132746 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209275426504 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127825634192 0.0645574589148 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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